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Dr.Moose1
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0 posted 2004-02-10 04:21 PM


Though princes I have heard of, with a kiss, ceased being toads,
and girls in ruby slippers, bound for Oz, via brick roads,
the mind, it fairly boggles, quite unable to decode
this thing you have referred to, tell me please, what is an ode?

With Alice through the looking glass ( a curious abode),
I've asked the Hatter, mad, he was, whose tea service was "Spode",
no anwers were forthcoming though our cups were overflowed,
pray tell, might you enlighten me as to what is an ode?

On Don Quixote's quest for truth, was priveledged to have rode,
did tilt at many windmills as from dragons tried to goad
an answer to the question while through numbers of them mowed,
without the slightest inkling of what constitutes an ode.

Far older, not yet wiser, I grow tired of this load,
the burden of my ignorance might cause me to explode,
this poem may be more suited to a stall with a commode,
the facts stand as reputed, I'm plumb clueless, what's an ode?



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Endlessecho
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1 posted 2004-02-10 04:39 PM


Oh my goodness.  Thank you so much Doc!  I needed that laugh, and I've never laughed so hard at a poem.  My sentiments exactly!!  Though I fear I may explode before you..my poor underused mind.  
I always enjoy your wit.  Thank you.

Dr.Moose1
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2 posted 2004-02-10 05:49 PM


Endlessecho,
Thank you. as usual, when unprepared for class, I just wing it with the hope that someone might find it amusing. I'm glad you did. I think I'll actually try to write one of these though, if, I can get a handle on it( crack-pot that I am).
Doc

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3 posted 2004-02-10 09:28 PM


LOL

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4 posted 2004-02-12 12:31 PM


I think you did rather well, Moose!  The only thing I'd even begin to criticize is your choice of subject matter, it's not very ode-like... also your stanza construction is a bit simple and could use a little more variety, in my opinion.

Otherwise, you seem to have the right idea.  Let's see you try another one out with more serious subject matter.  

Thanks for taking a shot at it, it's more than I can ask.

Brian

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Dr.Moose1
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5 posted 2004-02-20 06:04 PM


muted,
Shhhh, I think they might be listening! Seriously though, thanks!
Doc
Brian,
Thanks for the critique. When I wrote this I had absolutely no clue what an ode should sound like. I then read your explanation, and some examples, and decided to give it a whirl. This light hearted piece aside, I am here to try to learn something. Thanks again.
Doc

Bridget Shenachie
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6 posted 2004-02-24 09:07 AM


Moose--
I enjoyed the humor in every rhyming line.  I find writing an ode a bit daunting and it helps to start with a smile.
Shenachie

Nan
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7 posted 2004-03-13 09:53 AM


Haven't seen anything this good in any stall I've visited...

Doc's always been one for breaking the rules and following them at the same time... He defies description, methinks...

I truly enjoyed this, Doc - appropriate subject matter or not...

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