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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Heartbeat Your heartbeat is the sonnet that I write It’s rhythm guides the flow of feather quill That scrolls the loops and curves of my delight A melody my words cannot fulfill Your honey breaths of sweetness slowly melt Into the mystic lyrics that unfold So soft upon my neck your sigh is felt Too lovely is the fragrance to be told Your beauty is abundant in my eye Pure adoration dwells upon your face With diligence my pen cannot comply My little words unworthy of your grace How powerful the splendor of your charms How grand, the tiny newborn in my arms Elizabeth Santos |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is so beautiful, Liz. I am glad to see you. I haven't seen you in a while. |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Nan says that you must dream in iambic pentameter and I agree! This is very touching. Ken J |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Elizabeth, It's always a pleasure to read your works. This one was no exception. Be well. Doc |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Dear E. Just had to re-visit. Doc |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Wonderfully done, dear lady, as is customary for you. Your secret admirer, Pete [This message has been edited by Not A Poet (05-23-2003 01:07 AM).] |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Excellent, I love the twist! Well it seemed to be one to me anyway, I expected it to be the usual about a lover type sonnet and the last two lines change all that and make it really cool and unique  great read Luv, Liz xx "Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A beautifully written sonnet about a beautiful newborn. Keeping this. Maree |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Hi Elizabeth! It helps to read a well-written sonnet as I struggle to learn. I just cannot get iambic correct. Your ending is so startling with it sweetness. Can't fail to cause a smile. Shenachie |
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Yep - She lives and breathes iambics... Liz, you're amazing - This is perfect - almost as perfect as that new little must be. I'm so glad you got to spend some of her first few days with her... Thank you for posting this here, my friend...  |
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