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Sign of true love - first attempt at this
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zenny Member
since 2002-11-24
Posts 371Belgium 
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Severe I look upon my heart In blissful smiles it lives Genuine emotions float in there Now tender touch fullfills Opening this precious gem For me was very hard Times of doubt and even regret Roamed inside my soul Untill a glow filled my heart Electric sparks unlocked hearts'gates Loving you was worth the part Of torment before we met Void in heart is filling up Each day we share our love --- Maybe not that good yet, but i keep trying it  i like this form  |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Love your title and the outstanding development of your theme. Very impressive with such an nice message. Shenachie |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Zenny~ Well it's pretty obvious that this form likes you too ! This is very good ! *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
well done! Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. |
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JaiOfHeaven Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 207California, Usa |
As I read your poetry, It was like a soft water drizzling inside me. Melting my heart with it's warm caress. I rarely get that...It was a great feeling and thanks! Keep writing....and don't doubt yourself. Your writing is very admirable. |
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JaiOfHeaven Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 207California, Usa |
As I read your poem It was like a soft rain drizzling inside of me. Melting my heart with it's soft carress. I rarely feel that. Thanks and keep writing...don't think your anything but above average. You'll work harder. |
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JaiOfHeaven Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 207California, Usa |
As I read your poem it was like a soft rain drizzling inside of me. Melting my heart with it's warm carress. It was a great feeling and the poem itself flowed with a subliminal ecstasy. Your writing is admirable..think nothing less of it. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
very well done... enjoyed this one... regards, sudhir |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Very nice....I say you should stick with this form for a bit!!!! I agree with above it likes you a lot!!!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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wings of the moon Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 323Pink bubblegum land |
well done zenny, this is beautiful  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Zenny, I definitely see a sure sign of true live here... This is a marvelous first-or-any-time attempt...Very nice...  |
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