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Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

0 posted 2003-03-14 11:03 AM

Windows
Permitting eyes
To observe as they will
Here words seize, if they ever did,
Stanzas wait as bare-breasted mannequins
Souls, minds, lie bare in the open
Critiques come with a price
Gazers grazing
Windows

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

1 posted 2003-03-15 10:46 PM

Well Sunshine, it looks to me like you did this very well. But then, I knew you would.

Dr.Moose1
Member Elite

since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

2 posted 2003-03-16 06:04 PM

Sunshine,
No critiques here, I haven't even attempted this form yet. Just another "gazer grazing".
Doc

jjote
Senior Member

since 2002-12-25

Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada

3 posted 2003-03-17 05:55 AM

what's this ricta stuff? RULES, pleeease

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

4 posted 2003-03-24 09:07 AM

Windows
Total vision
From inside looking out
Baring all from outside inward
Revealing what we think lay unobserved
Open for worldly common view
Best hearts be genuine
So translucent
Windows

kayjay
Member Elite

since 2002-06-24

Posts 2015
Oregon

5 posted 2003-03-24 09:49 AM

Well done. (And thanks for the structure tips of the word at top and bottom) KJ
I will look in on Workshop more often.

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

kayjay
Member Elite

since 2002-06-24

Posts 2015
Oregon

6 posted 2003-03-24 10:00 AM

Windows with a wink

Windows
rictameters
are more difficult for
men than women because of the
time women spend with Windex and paper
towels cleaning bathroom mirrors,
upstairs windows, and the
blooming downstairs
Windows

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2003-03-24 11:27 AM

By gosh I think you've got it!

Bridget Shenachie
Senior Member

since 2002-01-23

Posts 1056
Kansas USA

8 posted 2003-03-25 01:09 AM

Windows
Give us witness
To the day when clouds drape
And block the sunshine from our eyes
Who needs a window on a sunny day?
Time to frolic in the daylight.
The weatherman's problem
Is his lack of
Windows.

(And then we have the inside looking out.) Love these thoughts on windows. You really started something, Sunshine, and see how far we've come.

Shenachie

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