My first and second Cinquains :)

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My first and second Cinquains :)

Justbleu
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since 1999-08-31

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Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

0 posted 2003-02-28 08:08 PM

Here is my first cinquain....

Visions
Flittering blind
Death now as thunder strikes
Red, purple, blue sickening me
Nightmare

And here is my second....

Marriage
Husband and wife
To love and to cherish
Souls entwined blending into one
Wedlock

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Andre Brink

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Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

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1 posted 2003-02-28 08:17 PM

And both of 'em good.

I like the first best, because it has bold imagery and strong movement (yeah, a guy thing, but good for this form) and a pretty stark emotional content. But -- each of them stands well.

The second has a softer subject and softer tone, but well within the strike zone for cinquain.

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Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

2 posted 2003-03-02 06:20 PM

And it's a girl thing to like that one better of course...

Justbleu
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since 1999-08-31

Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

3 posted 2003-03-02 09:57 PM

Thanks both of ya....now what are we doing for March??? I want to learn....

Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Andre Brink

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