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Titia Geertman
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0 posted 2002-08-13 07:35 PM



Like scattered leaves, my words will flow
Am I a poet? I don't know
Oh geez I'm not supposed to rhyme
Because this verse is meant to be free
But will I ever be free,
in verse, in life, in mind?
Like scattered leaves
of roses white
Blown off by wind in moments time
Like words in mind will disappear
the moment they pop up?
Will they ever flow
my words of rhyme not rhyming
like scattered leaves in red
like moments in life
But will I ever be free?
Am I a poet? I don't know
My words are scattered and
while flowing through my mind
I try to rhyme a free verse
I try to live a free life
I try so hard to keep a free mind
I don't know
All I know is that,




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Sudhir Iyer
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1 posted 2002-08-14 05:07 AM


you are a great poet
since you write from your heart
and you are a wonderful person
since you speak from your heart
and this is a great poem...
straight from the heart

and of course your words will foeverly flow...



regards to you Titia,
sudhir

Paul Wilson
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2 posted 2002-08-16 08:42 PM


Titia...Very Good. Really enjoyed reading.
To capture every single idea that comes to mind on paper would be wonderful, but like  leaves blowing in the wind some are meant to remain free.

Madame Chipmunk
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3 posted 2002-08-16 10:43 PM


Oh that is such a neat poem, Titia...
A free verse poem about not being able to write free verse...
I think we become so used to rhyming which is what makes it hard to write free verse.
The trick is to completely open your mind, write down your thoughts, replace the thoughts with wonderful images and then somehow turn it into a poem...
That last part is the trick, its what we are here to learn...
and it looks like you have a great start, Titia

Lyra

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"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Titia Geertman
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4 posted 2002-08-25 05:19 PM


Sudhir, you make me blush friend

Paul, I think you're right there

Lyra, thank you dear lady

Titia

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

Dr.Moose1
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5 posted 2002-08-25 08:46 PM


Titia,
The wondering, the anticipation... "will this be a write to remember?" This is what I get from your piece which I think you have expressed most eloquently.
Doc

Bridget Shenachie
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6 posted 2002-08-28 04:13 AM


Loved this poem, Titia.  I watch for your postings.  I have such frustrations with thoughts escaping like scattered leaves and most of what I write started out to be something else entirely.  Your poem let me know that I was not alone in my frustration.  Thanks for sharing!

Shenachie

Nan
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7 posted 2002-08-31 10:52 PM


Your words do indeed flow, Titia.. and you are truly a poet - Your verse in English is simply wonderful - You incorporate great imagery and share your thoughts with us quite fluently, m'friend...
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8 posted 2002-09-05 09:29 AM


Titia~

You let them scatter
in the wind
then rake so gently
the word-piles from within

Piles of poetry
at your beckoned call
If they rhyme
or they fall free
matters not
a whit to me

It only matters
that your thoughts-in-scatter
are placed with ease
of poet's please~


*You are soooooooo good !
We'll have a raking party in Tampa~
*Huggers*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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