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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Every Star When every star has flown the sky When every star has flown the sky And every moon beam said goodbye And every moon beam said goodbye When every moon beam, every star Has flown the sky, and said goodbye I still will hold a dream to keep I still will hold a dream to keep In darkness of the room I sleep In darkness of the room I sleep The still of darkness I will sleep In room I hold a dream to keep Of the cherished days our hearts unfold Of the cherished days our hearts unfold Memories which are in rhymes of gold Memories which are in rhymes of gold Of cherished hearts whichrhymes unfold The memories are in our days of gold When days unfold a said good-bye Our dream I hold has flown the sky Memories beam of hearts which still are The cherished rhymes to every star I will keep in darkness of the room And sleep in gold of every moon Elizabeth Santos |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Well Elizabeth, you not only write beautiful poems, you write beautiful paradelles, too. |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Beautiful and sensitive paradelle. Enjoyed. Shenachie |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Very Very Nice. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
 LizzieLady~Oh, how she sparkles ...Oh, how she shines ...~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Elizabeth, I swear this just brought a twinkle to my eye. Doc |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Well I was going to try one....now I don't know anymore LOL This is really good Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Ohhhhhhhhh Lordy......I am so far behind you in this learning thing. You make it all seem so simple and here I am JUST now studying Sonnets. Beautiful Paradelle......don't know all ther rules but I do know what reads beautifully and THIS DOES. Excellent visions of peaceful thoughts just spill out in this one. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Elizabeth, this reads like a lullably, something that a mum will sing to her children before they sleep, no longer afraid of monsters hanging around in the dark... well written! |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Well, I didn't think anyone could write a paradelle that was truly interesting. I was wrong. I still don't like all the repetition. I don't even like the form at all. But yours is pretty darn close. Even with all the words you had to jumble into the last stanza, it still made pretty good sense. Thanks, Pete |
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is truly wonderful, Lizzy... You've crafted this perfectly... and... You flushed out Pete's real reason for NOT writing one. Good work, dear lady..  |
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