first attempt at paradelles

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kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

0 posted 2002-07-15 05:22 AM

Project Myitta

My comfort zone abandoned
My comfort zone abandoned
I embrace the unknown
I embrace the unknown
I embrace my unknown zone,
the comfort abandoned

I joined overseas volunteering
I joined overseas volunteering
Anticipating meaningful interaction with diverse cultures
Anticipating meaningful interaction with diverse cultures
diverse interaction with overseas volunteering
meaningful cultures joined anticipating I

Exposure to harsh life's realities
Exposure to harsh life's realities
Proud that I allowed myself to mature
Proud that I allowed myself to mature
Exposure that I allowed myself
Proud to mature to harsh life's realities

Anticipating meaningful exposure,
I joined overseas volunteering
The diverse cultures embrace life's realities
Proud that I mature with interaction~
I joined myself to my abandoned unknown zone
Harsh comfort

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

1 posted 2002-07-15 11:14 AM

faterider,
Aren't you just a brave soul!

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Bridget Shenachie
Senior Member

since 2002-01-23

Posts 1056
Kansas USA

2 posted 2002-07-15 10:27 PM

Impressive first attempt at a paradelle with a truly impressive life story.

Shenachie

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

3 posted 2002-07-15 10:58 PM

Larry,
LOL...but since joining this overseas community service project, i have become more adventurous and more proactive about trying new and seemingly intimidating stuff...so yup, i am on my way to being a brave soul

....

Shenachie,
thanks for your "impressive"..muchly appreciated

i look forward to reading your poetry and to contributing more actively to the Poetry Workshop(if my muse cooperates with me)

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

4 posted 2002-07-16 10:59 PM

Very nice first attempt.

Paul Wilson

Member Elite

since 2002-07-07

Posts 4711
United States

5 posted 2002-07-20 10:34 AM

Now that I have read it, I am impressed.
Glad to have found it so quickly. Keep up the good work.

Dr.Moose1
Member Elite

since 1999-09-05

Posts 3448
Bewilderment , USA

6 posted 2002-07-20 08:39 PM

faterider,
This is not an easy format to write in, you've done well. The theme is strong and develops nicely right to the ending.
Doc

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

7 posted 2002-07-23 02:01 AM

thanks Sue and Paul for your kind comments...i am working hard on my second paradelle..let's do this a second time together, shall we?

Doc, thanks for the compliment! i was wondering whether my theme would be strong enough, since i was narrating a personal experience...thanks for your approval...

Not A Poet
Member Elite

since 1999-11-03

Posts 3885
Oklahoma, USA

8 posted 2002-07-23 04:14 PM

Ok, I confess that I just don't like the form but my hat is off

to anyone who can pull it off.

Pete

Never express yourself more clearly than you can think - Niels Bohr

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

9 posted 2002-08-01 11:28 AM

I think this format can be nearly as challenging as the one you've taken on in your life. You've handled it well, m'friend - I enjoyed this one...

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