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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands 
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I tried my best to write an anapestic trimeter (I think) and I wrote this for Balladeer I would want you to know that I'm glad With the time we together here had But I don't want to leave you so soon Come lets walk, there's a beautiful moon And I'll tell you some tales of my life There are lots, but I'm telling you five You're the best and that will be the first And the second, I'm dying of thirst So let's sit here while sipping some wine Under moonlight this should be quite fine And the third tale I'll tell you right here I want cheese to my wine Balladeer Now you're laughing but I laugh the most You sure teached me a lot, I say Proost But you know that I like to learn more I won't quit and that's tale number four And I know you will write me a song When I'm using the grammar so wrong Number five tale is truly here meant You're my bestest of bestest dear friend I don't really know if I got it right this time, let me know please Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
LOL!!! Well, Titia, I see you haven't forgotten my wine and cheese sonnet but let me tell you....this is excellent. You took a few liberties with the English language but the form and the meter is perfection....I am impressed beyond words that someone with English as a second language could get such a difficult form down so well....WELL DONE!!!  |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Titia, You've done exceptionally well with this, ( and didn't have to stumble on it like I did!) A very enjoyable read. Doc |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
I am always impressed with your poems, Titia, for all the reasons mentioned above, and because the thoughts and your writing convey such a warm heart and such a generous human spirit. A toast to your friendship with Balladeer! Shenachie |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Hi Deer, thanks sweet friend, I took notice of my few liberties with the English language and hope I changed them in the right way. Moose, thank you, it took a lifetime to get this right, but once I got the rythm right, I could play with my feet LOL Shenachie, thank you girl for your lovely words. Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Well Titia! It looks to me like you have this down very good. |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Excellent job Titia. I knew you could do it. Actually your liberties with the language were not all that noticeable. It really didn't bother me at all. It is really hard to maintain anapestic throughout but I think you have done it here. Thanks, Pete |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
 ... What would we ever do if we had a month where everyone had to write in DUTCH?.. This is great, Titia..  |
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Muys Member
since 2002-04-06
Posts 389The Netherlands |
Dearest daughter I must be silent  Your MOM  |
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