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Bridget Shenachie
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since 2002-01-23
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0 posted 2002-05-21 12:14 PM


Another one of my dry humor attempts. Let me know how to improve this one and I may repost it in Open.


The Shock of Insensitivity

Have you ever had anyone tell you how to feel?
That’s a whole different deck of cards;
Time to shuffle and redeal;
Or leave with no regards.

Some people don’t know that you feel what you feel;
That feelings are neither right or wrong;
They’re simply current and real,
An emotional ping-pong.

There are those who intrude and pontificate,
Presume to know your heart better than yourself,
Unaware that they may violate
Your soul and spiritual pelf.

Some just cannot allow you your feelings,
Offering the uninvited, insensitive platitudes;
Watch the display of your emotional reelings;
Then, wonder at your ingratitude!

I have a message for those with the proclivity
To wield the wire brush and intrusive currycomb.
“If you don’t learn some sensitivity,
Then, stay the hell at home.”

Shenachie

20 May 2002



© Copyright 2002 Louise Ryan - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2002-05-21 06:56 AM



You "bite" well...and I do believe I've learned a new word!

SmartChick
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2 posted 2002-05-21 09:15 AM


Yes! I have had someone do this quite often. I live with someone like that.
NapalmsConstantlyConfused
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3 posted 2002-05-21 10:56 AM


!!!

you used the word "pelf" correctly!!
150 cool points for you!
heh.
-Dave

Nan
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4 posted 2002-05-25 08:13 AM


Don't ya just love it when someone says, "How are you today"?... Then, of course, you're expected to return with a platitude such as "I'm fine, and you?"

What will those well wishers think when your retort is "Well, since you ask... I just got out of the hospital with ulcerative colitis: my husband has only beat me three times this week instead of the normal daily thrashing: the children all need new school clothes and I don't have the money: the dog chewed my best drapes to a frazzle: the roof needs to be repaired and it's leaking into the living room, and there are bats in the attic....  So, how are YOU?"...

.. I enjoyed this, Bridget - Thanks for sharing it with us..


Bridget Shenachie
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since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056
Kansas USA
5 posted 2002-05-29 11:14 PM


Sunshine--The bite surprises me--more angst than humor in this.  I just learned pelf myself with this writing.

SmartChick--Thanks for commenting.  I don't think that I could deal with this kind of emotional intrusiveness on a daily basis.  My hat is off to you!

NapalmsConstantlyConfused--Thanks for the points for correct word usage.  I needed them.  This poem lacks humor even though I consider this type of insensitivity absolutely ridiculous.  

Nan--Enjoyed your reply.  I think that I will start answering the automatic "How are you?" with "Absolutely wonderful!  Can't believe that you questioned it."

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