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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands 
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It is the same here every night I'm hanging here for my pc And so against the sleep I fight Am I addicted? Yes I might Sometimes I wish I wouldn't be It is the same here every night During day and during night I have to do so much you see And so against the sleep I fight In sunset's fading orange light I work on this darned pedigree It is the same here every night But I'll be filled with little pride When it is done, and done by me And so against the sleep I fight But I'm no fool, I know alright That really I'll be never free It is the same here every night And so against the sleep I fight A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... Check out my new website: lookheretitia.fcpages.com (I didn't 'link' this, so it won't take too much space).I |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Hey Titia, you do this very good. I like this. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Titia, " and so against the sleep I fight ". This is some wonderful phrasing, which, in the context of your well done villanelle, really sets this piece up nicely. Doc Ps, "Orange" was a little hesitant in the meter (but I can live with that). |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Nice work Titia. I noticed orange also but it didn't bother me. It is one of those words, like flower and some others, that fit all right as one or two syllables, for me anyway. I mean, you can't use that sort of thing much but if not done often, it works. Nice job here. I guess I better get busy so I don't flunk this class too. Thanks, Pete |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Titia, I was delighted to read your Villanelle. Glad that you beat the sleep to write it. Enjoyed! Shenachie |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Titia~ How I admire your skills of accomplishment~ Wonderfully done~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Your villanelle is great, Titia... I see you're mastered the art of choosing your words to fit well within your meter.. Nice job, my dear friend..  |
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