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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
A silken web of words ensnares their prey for in their dulcet tones are echoes heard of fears that lonliness will not allay and so we're given over to those words which speak a promise contrasting the facts though actions should dictate what we believe the consummate performers in these acts are both the speaker and those they decieve The one will say but that which you would hear and so create a hope where there is none The other listens only with his ears and not with heart and there-fore is un-done A play on words that often did befall the writer time again 'fore curtain call |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
Great poem. Good tension and all around well done. The hypenation is unnecessary in the third quattrain in my opinion. |
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I've read this several times - looking for more & more wordplays...  ... figuring you have a reason for your hyphens..One thing that jumps out at me is your first line. "A web of words ensnares their prey.." I asked myself whether the word 'web' is a collective noun that can by definition use a plural verb.. consulted my grammatical dictionaurus.. and found that it CAN qualify as such... You can say "The TEAM had ITS picture taken" - or - "The TEAM had THEIR pictures taken" - depending upon whether it was a picture of the team as a whole or pictures of the individual players... So.. I've answered my own question - Your context is acceptable - even though it sounds awkward to me.. Shut up now, Nance.. You're rambling...  |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Canuckster, Thank you my friend. You are correct in pointing out unnecessary hyphens. This is a very common mistake of mine. I guess that's what they make dictionaries for. Doc Nan, Nope , too dumb,lazy, or both to look it up! When in doubt, get the "Big" book out! Thanks," Mon Teacher Extraordinaire " Doc |
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