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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Behold that which is rarified now seen as common as a simple blade of grass once stripped from lush surrounding fields of green raised close before a contemplative eye A Lilliputian blade to wield in awe against dread nemesis the hands of time un-sheathed and held in readiness to draw a sigh of pure contentment long and slow Recline and feel the sun upon your face O' soldier of this lazy after-noon your battle with the clock has taken place and you've emerged victorious for now As spoils of war stretch end-lessly it seems transformed are thoughts of battle into dreams |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
This is the one I will study...I'm going to figure this sonnet thing out if it kills me. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Perfection, Doc! I like to think that we don't get older, we just get better....so I must be approaching fantastic.....hehe |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Beautiful Doc Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
There ya go again, Doc... Influencing the new guys.. Teaching them how to write in perfect meter - and how to bend the rhyme-scheme rules to suit your needs... Whatever am I gonna do with you? This is a great piece... as usual..  Duncan - Remember the formal rhyme schemes..  |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Never seen this rhyme scheme before....what is it? A Doctorian sonnet? lol  God bless America, my home sweet home. |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Hey Doc, Again, a really enjoyable read. I guess you bent the rules a bit with the rhyme scheme, enough to raise the question, is it still a proper sonnet. But it did hit home anyway and I liked it. Thanks, Pete |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Duncan, My apologies if I've made a confusing subject more confusing., that was not my intent. But hey, "Teach' did it first. Doc |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Denise, Oh, I think you're well past fantastic, and at such an early age too! But, I'm afraid I mave have taken a few liberties with the rhyme scheme on this. Thanks Doc |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Titia, Thank you.But, as Nan pointed out, just cause it looks like a sonnet, and sounds somewhat like a sonnet,don't make it a sonnet. Doc |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Nan, Caught me again. Oh well, guess I'll just call it a poem and leave it at that. Thanks, and I'm glad you liked it. Doc |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Elizabeth, Thank you for your suggestion.I don't think world is quite ready for me to have my own format, but it was certainly a nice compliment. Doc |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Pete, Thank you,I guess the official ruling is in . Nope. But it was an interesting write, and judging from the replies, not a bad read. Doc |
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