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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Da dum da dum da dum da dum da dum The rhythm’s ringing well into the night It is the sound of Nancy’s beating drum And I know very well my poet’s plight I’ve got to get this homework done real soon But I can’t think of what to write about I’m tired of writing of the stars and moon And roses and petunias sure are out! Nan's going to say, “Hey Liz, you are terrif! Pentameter is surely your forte” The minutes tick away. Oh, only if I could devise a theme by break of day I’m thinking with my fingertips and thumb Da dum da dum da dum da dum da dum Liz |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Very cool. I'm having the same prob...lol. It'd be alright if the themes came when we needed them and not after.  Thanks for the read. Much enjoyed.  ~AF~ If this is all the world has to offer, I want a refund on my life. |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
And a second one already? Come on now, you're gonna make the rest of us look like slackers  Pete |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Quit showing off Liz!  Very cute though, and I can surely relate. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well I got this one  the dah, dum made sense, but the new one - where is the dah dum in it? LOL, so you guys write these rules or what? Okay, okay, back to dahdumming, and trust me, by January 30th, I will have done a darn sonnet if it kills me (which it might yet)  Oh well, I can cook!~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~ |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I'm trying to hear the da DUM...thanks this helped. BTW, great poem. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Delightful, Elizabeth! Even when you have nothing to write about you do it well! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Liz, I'm the last one to pick anyone apart, but HELP... in one line, my fingers and thumbs counted 11... do we adhere to a strict 10...or what? 'Cause everytime I write one and off a beat or two...that Balladeer picks on me! Oh wait! See, now, that's the legal in me. I read "Nan IS" for "Nan's"...aha...semantics! Ok, Cool! Perfect! Lesson learned! |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
I like it, I like it and teach will surely say you're terrif, cause you are Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You all know that Elizabeth's teriff' She writes with index fingers or her thumbs It matters not to her there is no diff'.. She somehow always manages da-DUMs Her work is always simply perfect rhyme She rises with the sun to pen her thoughts And whips up wondrous works in zero time While all of us wait anxiously she jots Before you know she's quilled a masterpiece For Passions folk her wisdom is sublime May Lizzy's awesome writing never cease She gives us all a model we can mime Whenever you're unsure of what to write Just ask our Liz - you're sure to get it right... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Aw gee, and there's Nan's perfect sonnet as an illustration. She is so good at Da Dums, that she sings that very phrase in the shower, and makes every song have lines of 10 syllables Thank you, teacher for your kind words, and for teaching Da Dums to one who can't sing (thank goodness) And Denise, our sonnet queen, who was one who also taught me with her sensational and beautiful examples' Thank you all for your responses Liz |
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Canuckster Member
since 2002-01-09
Posts 285New Mexico, USA |
This is a good instructional piece. Poets who are stuggling to really "hear" what iambic pentameter should be able to read this and get a clue. Iambic Pentameter allows for additional beats. You can have 11 beats to a line on occassion. Traditionally, what makes iambic pentameter is the presence of 5 strong accents within a line (hence the "penta"meter.) The presence of an extra weak syllable (or for that matter the absence of one) is traditionally considered to be acceptable as long as there remain 5 strong accented beat within the line. In practise, you should use that small liberty sparingly, but you can do it still stay technically within the form. I enjoyed reading this. never try to teach a pig to sing |
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