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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands 
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Eden sweet Eden serpentine verses serpentine garden of Eden, a lovely garden home of Adam and Eve, God's home he created them out of nothing didn't he darkness to light and again to darkness love was all around them, everlasting love strolling thrue the garden, Eve loved strolling appels on the tree, big juicy shining red appels God said NO, no appels, but Eve disobeyed God snake told her to eat one, very intriging this snake sinn it was said God and he explained to her this sinn ashamed they became, why, they were never ashamed lost her right to be there and they became lost apple of Eve became Adam' s appel lump in his throat a big lump home sweet home sweet home sweet Eve Adam Eve Adam Eve Adam parents of parents mistake said the snake biting his own tail by mistake A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... Feel free to use the pictures on my website. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace/ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
WOW ... WAAAAY COOL...... not only did ya do the line requirement of the repetative word...but ya made it a shape poem as well...... VERY COOL and CLEVER Titia ... YOU get the teachers apple and a star for this  well done poetess  Do these Serpentine poems ever rhyme? You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do. |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Hi Janet Marie, thanks so much for your words, I'm all  Do serpentine verses ever rhyme? I don't know, it doesn't say (see: I've got a question, Not a Poet explained it to me) It might though, but that is way over my head, being a Dutchie  Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... Feel free to use the pictures on my website. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace/ [This message has been edited by Titia Geertman (edited 11-15-2001).] |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
very cool! Lizzy ~The first two cup of tea is to throw away; what remains is the best of all. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Cool, very cool. Well, I managed one line. lol Again, Titia...BRAVO!!! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Bravo indeed... This is superb, Titia - You've put together a wonderful presentation of the original serpentinious sin... Got any appels left??  |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
Apple tree apple falls near Eve it falls Hits the moist ground it hits snake sees chance in grass snake slithers slow silent sneaky subtle slithers tells Eve sweet "Eat, sweet Eve" it tells Eve eats apple but God sees eating Eve God sees law broken sees God God says "Why?" says God Eve sways fearful Eve Adam swears. "Adam!" Stop it Stop!! Stop it Stop!! Don't say that don't!! Swearing is bad, your swearing offends God until our God offends Eden we leave not as innocent as Eden you had a fine idea there, Titia -Dave I Love The Smell Of Napalm In The AM! |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
*WOW* very well done Titia....  |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Thanks to you all friends. Duncan gave me inspiration with his 'snakes and apples' and although I'm a non-religious person, it made me think of the story of Adam and Eve immediately. Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Cool poem, cool style Titia, I still don't know what serpentine is, but I like this lots. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Hi Tracey, thanks for replying. Serpentine is a verse where each line ends with the same word as it begins. Serpentine = snake thus: snake bites his own tail and makes the circle round: head = tail, tail = head = first lineword is same as last lineword. Does this make any sense??? Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... Want to use the pics on my website? Just let me know. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace/http://comm [This message has been edited by Titia Geertman (edited 11-26-2001).] |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Now I understand what serpentine is, thanks Titia. Wow, we're all behind. You and Doc are the only ones who've done your homework. I'd better start writing, it's nearly the end of the month!!! If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? [This message has been edited by Tracey (edited 11-27-2001).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Titia~ This is just too, too lovely~ Lovely, you've inspired a thought in me Me in penning the beginning Beginning of the circle of me~ *Love you~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Amazing Titia. Perhaps I'll be brave enough to try one myself some day. |
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