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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands 
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I snap a shot of a splashing smashing sun I'm zip zapping my finger in zealousness fun as she softly sink sank into the swirling sea It's a smashing sight for this shilly shally me Shining whispering waves shoot on the shore I'm dashing forward to snap some shots more The sizzling sound of sleazy seaworms I hear As sunset sets in and lights slowly disappear A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... Feel free to use the pictures on my website. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace/ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Titia~ I found this a delightful tongue-twister~ 'Shining whispering waves shoot on the shore' I LOVE the idea of waves shooting on the shore !  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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cpalmer Senior Member
since 2001-06-26
Posts 977Phoenix, Az |
This is great Titia! Tongue twister indeed! but I loved it! I thought you said that the Dutch couldn't do these? You have shown me up that's for sure! Hugs Cindi |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Thanks Marge, yes a tongue-twister indeed, can't even say it outlout myself without hesitation  Cindi, hugs to you to dear, I tried with my Webster in front of me  I never say no to a challenge Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Titia , Very descriptive w/good alliteration and flow. If I were going to be picky ,( which means no matter how I put it , it will sound that way ) you may have included more sound effects . Swoosh ! I'm outta here , nice poem my friend . Doc |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
Wavy and cool o yuh |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
Your poem perfectly places poetic pictures of a smashing sunset splashing into a swirling sea in such a seemingly simple yet superb set of sights and sounds that even a shilly shally like me can see how special it is! Nice job and fun to read! |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Oh my Titia.... I better go back to my books and study some more! Great write.  |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Cool words you picked out here Tisha. This onamatawhatever stuff looks like fun. Think I'll try one soon If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
whoooohooooo Titia......love it especially the tongue twister....hehehehesitated one for this dutchie too Charisma |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
LOL.. Gotta love that "sizzling sound of sleazy seaworms.." I NEVER knew they sizzled.. hehe.. I'll be listening from now on... giggling here..  |
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