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Romy
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0 posted 2001-10-11 11:12 AM


Catbird! He giggles with obvious glee
clip-clopping, he circles the dogwood tree
The small gray bird, mews it’s music and preens
for a tittering tot in tiny blue jeans.

September sizzles with sights and sounds
a marvelous morning of noise abounds
Every bleep, blurt and buzz is heard with joy
as I wander the woods with my sweet little boy.

Sunlight shimmies off the rainbow fish
in the silver stream where they splash and splish
fat toads croak to my small son’s delight
and slip from his clutch to hop out of sight

Autumn crackles underfoot on the road
green grass ripples, flowers explode
Every honk, every hiss cannot be ignored
not a cluck or a quack can be left unexplored

But soon the blue in the sky will shatter,
clatter with many more serious matters
Innocence bright, on this day will blur,
United hearts will pound, unsure

When thunder quakes in a distant land
and shakes the earth on which we stand
the crashing, the clashing, the banging, the boom
will rumble with fears of unknown doom

Today though we hear only pleasant noise,
God’s gift to mommies and their little boys
A lovely stroll in late September,
a morning of peace that we’ll always remember





















© Copyright 2001 Deborah L. Carter - All Rights Reserved
Munda
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1 posted 2001-10-11 12:32 PM


Oh my goodness Romy, this is great writing and helps me a lot understanding Onomatopoeia better. Great write!  
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2 posted 2001-10-11 01:41 PM


Romy~
Well ... look at you go~
This is just wonderful~
Gets an A+ in my grading book~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Titia Geertman
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3 posted 2001-10-11 03:07 PM


WOW, Romy so this is how a onomatowhatsitsname looks like  

Really enjoyed it.

Titia

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Feel free to use the pictures on my website. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace/

Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 2001-10-11 03:44 PM


I agree with the A+
A marvelous poem with
all the ingredients
required
Liz

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5 posted 2001-10-12 06:28 AM


LOVEITloveitLOVEITyepIloveit!!!!



Charisma

Romy
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6 posted 2001-10-12 10:57 AM


Thanks for all the great replies on my poem!

It has only been a few days since I returned from a trip to the northeast, (Vermont, NY).
I saw what remains of the twin towers and it was shocking.  I remember visiting the towers on one of my trips and my heart hurt when I saw the destruction.
October 11, being the one month aniversary,  I decided to try and write my feelings of that day into my poem.

I love to using onomatopoeia in poetry because I tend to "tell" rather than "show" when I write.  The sounds help me to create an image.

Debbie


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7 posted 2001-10-15 07:15 AM


Very kewl indeed - I see lotsofonomatalliteration here... and it's a great depiction of the fun we have hanging out on a fall day with a curious little boy - I like it...
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8 posted 2001-10-21 03:52 AM


a perfect poem on onamot or not
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