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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
Catbird! He giggles with obvious glee clip-clopping, he circles the dogwood tree The small gray bird, mews it’s music and preens for a tittering tot in tiny blue jeans. September sizzles with sights and sounds a marvelous morning of noise abounds Every bleep, blurt and buzz is heard with joy as I wander the woods with my sweet little boy. Sunlight shimmies off the rainbow fish in the silver stream where they splash and splish fat toads croak to my small son’s delight and slip from his clutch to hop out of sight Autumn crackles underfoot on the road green grass ripples, flowers explode Every honk, every hiss cannot be ignored not a cluck or a quack can be left unexplored But soon the blue in the sky will shatter, clatter with many more serious matters Innocence bright, on this day will blur, United hearts will pound, unsure When thunder quakes in a distant land and shakes the earth on which we stand the crashing, the clashing, the banging, the boom will rumble with fears of unknown doom Today though we hear only pleasant noise, God’s gift to mommies and their little boys A lovely stroll in late September, a morning of peace that we’ll always remember |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Oh my goodness Romy, this is great writing and helps me a lot understanding Onomatopoeia better. Great write!  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Romy~ Well ... look at you go~  This is just wonderful~ Gets an A+ in my grading book~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
WOW, Romy so this is how a onomatowhatsitsname looks like  Really enjoyed it. Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I agree with the A+ A marvelous poem with all the ingredients required Liz |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
LOVEITloveitLOVEITyepIloveit!!!!  Charisma |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
Thanks for all the great replies on my poem! It has only been a few days since I returned from a trip to the northeast, (Vermont, NY). I saw what remains of the twin towers and it was shocking. I remember visiting the towers on one of my trips and my heart hurt when I saw the destruction. October 11, being the one month aniversary, I decided to try and write my feelings of that day into my poem. I love to using onomatopoeia in poetry because I tend to "tell" rather than "show" when I write. The sounds help me to create an image. Debbie |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very kewl indeed - I see lotsofonomatalliteration here... and it's a great depiction of the fun we have hanging out on a fall day with a curious little boy - I like it... |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
a perfect poem on onamot or not |
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