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Images of Love - A sonnet
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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Thou art sunshine oh my love In blessed ray of golden charm The scent of rose the coo of dove Can all be found within your arm, Thou art a rainbow during rain The softening touch of morning mist Thy touch my love, canst keep me sane As red velvet lips yearn to be kissed Thou art the wind in springtime breeze Thou warmth of breath makes promise new In sacred prayer, I fall to my knees With whispered words for just we two Thou art by nature strong and fair I meet with thee, find passion there Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Well gosh, Kethry~ Just go ahead and GLOW ! This is wonderful ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
This is gorgeous Kethry... My compliments sweetie... ~coco |
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Suzanne Arlene Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377Ontario, Canada |
Oh Oh Oh Oh Oh just too darn good Kethry mad me melt Suzanne |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Kethry , Hey , they didn't teach this stuff in school ( well maybe after school ) . No fair ! Maybe I should have been looking over your shoulder . Doc |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
"Thou art by nature strong and fair I meet with thee, find passion there" BEAUTIFUL work, my friend. This will get an a+, I'm sure!  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Very nice, I like this one a lot. Gene (formerly, u_gene) |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
A beautiful poem with beautiful imagery. : ) |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
The last stanza is the one I love the best, but the whole poem is filled with strong images. I wish I could say something other than this is beautiful, but that is what this is when I read it. Beautiful! Debbie |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
I envy anyone who can write a sonnet especially one like the one I have just read. You make it sound so easy. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Thanks everyone, for all the images you presented that gave me inspiration to write this. Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Hey Kethry... Nice job here... You've developed your theme about love quite nicely.. Your imagery (both metaphor and personification) adds a nice touch... Good job on that, my friend..  Sonnets are fun, aren't they?... Here's what I see in the structure of this one.. Your meter is predominantly iambic tetrameter - That deviates from the classic pentameter, but is pretty widely used in modern verse... I see you deviating from it in lines 1,6,8, and 11... Meter is easily adjusted, though.. I like this one a lot, Keth... 'Tis a good'n.. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Nan, I did very well with cubits, feet, inches and miles but my brain won't accept any metrics. So it's not surprising my metre changes from line to line. It sounds good in my head but when I read it back I realise I've added or subtracted a syllable here and there(now I feel like Old Macdonald, A syllable here, a syllable there, here a short, there a long everywhere it's wrong wrong!) I would be interested in learning more about iambic pentametre as the lines always seem to be too long to me, but when I read others I'm impressed by how it flows. Thanks for the constructive criticism. Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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