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Loving Every Day (A sad attempt at '101")
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
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This is my first attempt at acrostics, so please be gentle! Longing for the sun to rise Over the soft green hills Views that stir and touch my soul I still look and get chills Nothing ever could make me Give up this glorious day I see Each day is a gift from God Veiled by sorrow, but beautiful still Every day I rise Ringing tears from my eyes Yonder daylight? I long to feel Dawn will come to us each day And each morn, with gratefulness I pray Yearning to feel all days to come < !signature--> "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoveBug~ I'm gonna spank your booty if I find you putting down this FINE acrostic from my friend !  I happen to think this is an EXCELLENT job ! And I'm usually NOT wrong !  The message is just lovely and I'd say it's just wonderful ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Suzanne Arlene Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377Ontario, Canada |
That was a beauty Lovebug.You did an excellent job. Pat yourself on the back now Suzanne |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Dandy, you betcha! Krawdad |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
Lovebug, This is a lovely poem, wistful and sweet, all tied together as a great acrostic! Great job on your first one, I hope to read more from you in the future! How about a double now? |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Sad attempt? Are you kidding me? This is great! |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
It's hard enough to come up with one of these acrostic poems, but to make sense too? You did a great job. ~Gene |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Lovebug, there's no need to be gentle. This is a fine job and if I hear you say otherwise I will have to join Marge's queue for spanking you. write on Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You've mastered the basic acrostic nicely, LoveBug... There's absolutely no reason to use kidd gloves on you... If you want to take it a step further, then consider a consistent rhyme scheme or meter. This is just fine as it is though... sort of a free-rhyming verse...  |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Erica --- You kidding me? This is beautiful. Inspired me to try writing one I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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