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Suzanne Arlene Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377Ontario, Canada |
Awaken me October Awaken me October Before my deep sleep Before my deep sleep sleep deep my October awaken before me Dance with the wind Dance with the wind Naked upon my skin Naked upon my skin With my naked skin Dance upon the wind Celebrate my life Celebrate my life Fill it with contentment Fill it with contentment Fill life with my contentment Celebrate it. The deep wind,sleep Upon my October skin Awaken before me My contentment with life Fill it with my dance Celebrate naked |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Suzanne, With four left feet and a fur coat it's kinda hard to dance naked , but I sure like your style. Doc |
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Suzanne Arlene Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377Ontario, Canada |
In Canada we dance very fast lol before anything freezes lol |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
This is so beautiful, what a nice job you have done! But, I'll skip the naked dancing part, I just recently moved from Vermont, don't think I'll ever warm up! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
A beautiful paradelle Liz |
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Suzanne Arlene Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377Ontario, Canada |
Well thank you all for responding . It was my very first one and i was afraid to do it. But i had alot of fun. May try doin another one .Happy Halloween BOOOOOOO |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You've got it right - Your format works - You've built upon a theme nicely and you've got your repetitions done properly... Nice work..  If you're doing another one and you really happen to be feeling masochistic, try adding meter or rhyme scheme. You'll really be cursing this innocuous little format then.. |
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