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Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
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0 posted 2000-04-27 12:34 PM


Twilight

The Hand of the Artist swift brushes the sky
With pale pinkish color set over the blue
Then soft opal beams from the clouds overlie
Magnificent streaks of an amethyst hue

He dabbles His brush into tints on His palette
As greys of the twilight burst fast into gold
Then rapidly changing to deep royal purple
As blending of brush strokes the beauty unfolds

A corner of aureate light slowly fading
Turns emerald green field into copper and bronze
The Artist then darkens the colors to shading
And erases reflection on rivers and ponds

As nighttime approaches the blue-blacks  yet deepen
With uplifted eyes we look on from afar
The sky is enriched and our rapture is steepened
As He sprinkles the heavens with little white stars

Elizabeth Santos

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Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
1 posted 2000-04-27 12:37 PM


I just wrote this one last night. I think a lot of my poems are extended metaphors, because I think in metaphors, and I think most poets do, don't they?
Liz

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Floating gently on a cloud....
2 posted 2000-04-28 04:46 AM


I read it once and I read it again but my opinion doesn't change: Wonderful!! I would think it's a metaphor...I'm not too sure but the way I interpret it is that is a metaphor for creation. I think that poets think in metaphors because there is a certain magic in being able to write somthing with so much meaning.  

Well, thank you for allowing me the pleasure of reading and replying your beautiful poem!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Nan
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3 posted 2000-04-29 08:15 AM


Neat poem....

In the context of this being "God" painting a picture upon the horizon at twilight, the extended metaphor works.  You've certainly utilized metaphors within your verses as well...

You never mention God, though the reader knows he has to be the Artist... This works...

I love sunset/sunrise poetry... I don't think I could read too much of it... Nice one, my friend..

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