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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash 
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*Following Kris's & Pete's lead, I am submitting my first ever Passions post which, incidentally, utilizes extended metaphor ... Nan, I hope you don't mind the repost. *** Like an empty hearth, my soul, cold and desolate when you found me, poor and needy, eyes blinded to my own heart's poverty. Your love ignited the kindling: from a spark, a flame; from a flame, a roaring fire. My words are like the ashes rising from that blaze, cast to the heavens, bearing witness to the fire that rages below like circling Seraphs, burning bright for a moment, to disappear from sight, carried off by the four winds. No longer needy, no longer poor, no longer dark, no longer desolate, only hungry. The same flames that give light and warmth also consume me. I long for more of your love, fearing the day when these bright flames become dark smoke. Against that day my spirit desperately strives. Who would turn from the fire and return to the empty hearth? I will not. I cannot. Though your flame be distant as the stars above, by it I am warmed. Though the clouds obscure its light, by it I see. May my love also be your warmth, your light. < !signature--> Jim "If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther [This message has been edited by jbouder (edited 04-12-2000).] |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Ok Jim, what's going on ? No epic and now a repost ?  No spitbals ! there's no one to hide behind !  LOL You know what ? I love this one ! Glad you reposted, otherwise I may never have read it ! |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
"Ok Jim, what's going on ? No epic and now a repost?" That's a fair question (and, Munda, I know you are being playful). I'm trying to get a new hotel opened before the July 4th weekend (U.S. Independence Day) in Hershey, Pennsylvania (home of Hershey Foods) and have a dozen other tasks on top of that so real life hasn't left much time for writing. I'm glad you liked this, Munda. Hopefully I'll be back up to speed in here soon. Jim |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Hi Jim, It looks like they're never going to stop with the epic thing. But, in all honesty, you were the one to suggest it Hey, this one really comes from the heart, doesn't it. I guess I don't understand this extended metaphor stuff well enough to say much more than I like it. It seems unusual the way you have used the fire almost as a real thing instead of a metaphor or image. Or does that make it an image instead? No, don't think so. Well looke like I'm beginning to ramble here so better stop.  Nice work. Pete |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Jim, I'm guess I'm a bit surprised at seeing this side of you...saw some in the poem about your son, but this is quite different. Very well done...the words and images ... excellent. Very romantic...bet your wife loved it! Kris the poet's pen...gives to airy nothing A local habitation and a name ~ Shakespeare |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
Jim... this is a real neat one... I liked it a lot If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Awesome... simply awesome.. This is a great "extended metaphor".. LOL@Pete... quote: By George, I think he's got it.. I don't mind at all that you've reposted.. I'm about to do the same - But, I wrote a new one too..  |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
allow me to write this informal cinquain for you  ")Fire Rages on, Burning bright sparks Like your warm tender Love |
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