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Hope, tears, and renewal Member
since 2000-03-27
Posts 74 |
Welcome to the masquerade, Here we dance to an endless song. Here we sing to an endless tune, We all wear masks to hide our wrongs. We never know who we're dancing with, Don't know the dancers in the dance of fate. Don't question the steps we learn from birth. Don't know the whole dance until it's too late. Some see through the masks we wear, Angered by answers they never receive. They don't care to learn the steps of the dance, So the hosts of the masquerade ask them to leave. And so we continue in our masquerade, We dance and spin and turn and bend. And we hold our masks on oh-so tight, Just hope they stay on until the end. ~~Well, that's it. I hope it's ok... i tried hard, I really did! Hey, I never ever tried this hard in any non-online classes! |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Well, I'm not Nan(i.e brilliant at this kinda stuff!) but I loved this! Comparing life to a masqerade...I never thought about that before but it's very accurate really. Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is a rainbow of delight." |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Hi, HT&R.... You seem to have accomplished your task quite nicely... Life is, indeed, a masquerade. We wear many faces, many hats, and don many a costume throughout the duration of our years here.. You've condensed all of this into a "masquerade ball"... Your rhyme scheme and meter are mostly consistent, but they aren't the focus here, so I'll not dwell on them. You've done a really good job on your metaphor - This piece is a pleasure for your readers to enjoy... I hope you stick around for more fun times at Passions High...  |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Oh yes, please stick around ! I enjoyed this very much. In fact I think this is great ! |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
hey there... just like NAN said... this is great work... and such a pleasure to read... WELL DONE If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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