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Your eyes---please respond |
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Ender Member
since 1999-12-08
Posts 200Yuma, AZ USA 
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As I stare into your eyes Seeing the fiery passion Deep within Captivating my heart Enchanting my soul The feeling That is shared Is one of love Of desire To be kept And cherished From now Till eternity |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Another great poem. Do you ever run out of words? Your poetry is all really brilliant please keep writing it and posting it and I will keep replying.  |
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Smore Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 67el paso |
with words so sweet, you must get all the ladies. Love isn't a miracle in life, the miracle of life is love. |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Great poem.....I love the words. Keep it up! Salooma |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
ender: this poem is quite lovely, in fact i think most of your poetry is quite good... however, i cannot possibly respond meaningfully to all of it... i look and see that your poems take up nearly half the list on a given day... i appreciate your fervor and writing ability, but if you really want people to reply, you have to give them something (not things) to reply to... another thing that confuses me is that half of them say "please respond" at the end... i don't know if those are the ones you actually want responses on, and if i were to respond to only one poem, which would you want me to respond to?... normally i will respond to an entire list of poems when i sit down to do so, but i am often overwhelmed by the sheer mass of yours (nor do i think it fair to spend so large an amount of time on your poem and neglect others who have posted a single poem)... i am not a moderator, and i dont not claim to speak for the forum, but i (personally) would appreciate it greatly if you would post no more than two poems per day... perhaps then i can give you a meaningful analysis... with utmost respect and sincerity, jerome the boy with numb hands A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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Singer1981 Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148Fredonia, NY USA |
I really liked this. I totally love how some people's eyes just show so much...can't wait to read more!! |
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