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since 1999-12-08
Posts 200
Yuma, AZ USA

0 posted 2000-01-29 01:38 PM

As I stare into your eyes
Seeing the fiery passion
Deep within
Captivating my heart
Enchanting my soul
The feeling
That is shared
Is one of love
Of desire
To be kept
And cherished
From now
Till eternity

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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
1 posted 2000-01-29 05:14 PM

Another great poem. Do you ever run out of words? Your poetry is all really brilliant please keep writing it and posting it and I will keep replying.

since 2000-01-24
Posts 67
el paso
2 posted 2000-01-29 05:36 PM

with words so sweet, you must get all the ladies.

 Love isn't a miracle in life, the miracle of life is love.

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since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

3 posted 2000-01-29 05:39 PM

Great poem.....I love the words. Keep it up!


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since 1999-12-04
Posts 549
new orleans
4 posted 2000-01-29 05:45 PM

ender: this poem is quite lovely, in fact i think most of your poetry is quite good... however, i cannot possibly respond meaningfully to all of it... i look and see that your poems take up nearly half the list on a given day... i appreciate your fervor and writing ability, but if you really want people to reply, you have to give them something (not things) to reply to... another thing that confuses me is that half of them say "please respond" at the end... i don't know if those are the ones you actually want responses on, and if i were to respond to only one poem, which would you want me to respond to?... normally i will respond to an entire list of poems when i sit down to do so, but i am often overwhelmed by the sheer mass of yours (nor do i think it fair to spend so large an amount of time on your poem and neglect others who have posted a single poem)... i am not a moderator, and i dont not claim to speak for the forum, but i (personally) would appreciate it greatly if you would post no more than two poems per day... perhaps then i can give you a meaningful analysis... with utmost respect and sincerity,
jerome the boy with numb hands

 A savage place! as holy and enchanted
As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted
By woman wailing for her demon-lover!

since 1999-12-02
Posts 148
Fredonia, NY USA
5 posted 2000-01-30 02:11 PM

I really liked this.  I totally love how some people's eyes just show so much...can't wait to read more!!
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