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Safwan Arekat Junior Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 38Bahrain |
Sweet She is sweeet the sweetest sweet fit for a pot of the purest treat Cute is her face it makes me daze soft is her heart in passion and heat Her way of dress is high finesse with rosy scent and makeup neat Bold is her tongue to lash and stun fast is her wit that can’t be beat Strong is her will with noble aims and in retreat there’s no defeat These are traits I judged from afar What will I say if I ever meet ? Safwan Arekat http://magicboat.com |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Nice poem you got there. Keep it up. I hope your "sweet"heart and you hit it off. Keep  |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Great poem....sounds like you really like her  ) Maybe you should let her know.Salooma |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
safwan: simply wonderful... i love the structure (though odd... mabye that's why i like it)... and the words flow together simply and effectively... i love it... you might consider changing the last verse's "if I ever meet?" to "if WE ever meet?"... i think that's more what you meant... very good job... sincerely, jerome the boy with numb hands A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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