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Safwan Arekat
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since 2000-01-29
Posts 38
Bahrain

0 posted 2000-01-29 01:01 PM


Sweet

She is sweeet          the sweetest sweet
fit for a pot         of the purest treat

Cute is her face         it makes me daze
soft is her heart     in passion and heat

Her way of dress          is high finesse
with rosy scent           and makeup neat


Bold is her tongue       to lash and stun
fast is her wit        that can’t be beat

Strong is her will        with noble aims
and in retreat          there’s no defeat

These are traits       I judged from afar
What will I say            if I ever meet ?

Safwan Arekat http://magicboat.com

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ESP
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
1 posted 2000-01-29 05:27 PM


Nice poem you got there. Keep it up. I hope your "sweet"heart and you hit it off.
Keep  

Salooma
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since 2000-01-28
Posts 781

2 posted 2000-01-29 05:32 PM


Great poem....sounds like you really like her  ) Maybe you should let her know.

Salooma

poetry_kills
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since 1999-12-04
Posts 549
new orleans
3 posted 2000-01-29 06:02 PM


safwan: simply wonderful... i love the structure (though odd... mabye that's why i like it)... and the words flow together simply and effectively... i love it... you might consider changing the last verse's "if I ever meet?" to "if WE ever meet?"... i think that's more what you meant... very good job...

sincerely,
jerome the boy with numb hands

 A savage place! as holy and enchanted
As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted
By woman wailing for her demon-lover!
~Coleridge

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