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Floating gently on a cloud....

0 posted 2000-01-29 05:08 AM

Loss is cruel...
It’s path is one of destruction,
Leaving broken hearts and tears in its wake.
It makes day as dark as night.
It silences the song of love.
What was once warm is now cold,
Happiness is replaced with sorrow.
You try to be strong but the pain is so enervating,
It wears you down and you feel helpless.
You can’t understand why...
Why he has treated you in this way,
You question yourself but answers evade you.
You feel a crushing weight on your chest
As a spasm of pain twists your heart.
You wonder how it is that everyone but you knew.
Knew he was playing with your heart,
As though it were an inanimate object.
You are outwardly calm but your eyes
Betray the anguish within.
You torment yourself with memories of the past,
You can’t understand why this had to happen.
You wish it could have been different,
Him sharing your affection sincerely
Instead of abusing your faith in him.
At the time when you most need all your friends,
Many abandon you, the world seems two faced,
You feel so lost and alone...

But even though Depression has spread Her cloak
Over your once-joyful world,
You must not give up.
Your true friends will support you in your time of need.
Don’t keep saying everything is alright
When you are breaking down inside.
Rather, let yourself cry.
Cry for the happiness that was yours.
Cry for the injustice of the world.
Cry for the evil in him.
Cry for the betrayal of your trust.
Cry for affection unrequited by him.
Let your tears cleanse your soul of sorrow.
Then start anew:

See a beginning instead of an end,
The future instead of  the past.
Let time heal the wounds....
One day soon your heart will mend
And you will find the bliss you desire and deserve.

I wish I could eliminate the pain you feel now...
If I could suffer the hurt instead of you I would.
Know that I am hurting right along with you,
That now I share in your sorrow as I shared in your joy.
I love you and I will always be there for you no matter what,
Let that be balm for your aching heart.
I can’t change the past, it is over,
But I can and will help you pave your future.
Together, we can face the evil out there.
Together, we can overcome your pain.
So have faith in yourself and in me,
We will endure the present pain
Knowing that there will come a time
When there will be no more tears.

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1 posted 2000-01-29 01:30 PM

This is a very good poem. I feel that way a lot. It isn't so much the loss of love that makes someone feel the way you discribe, I think it is the absance of love. I also like how you ended the poem on a happy note of hope. Good work!

 "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world"

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2 posted 2000-01-29 01:42 PM

Great poem! I really like it. I think most of us can relate to it greatly! I love the way you put it!


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3 posted 2000-01-29 02:17 PM

I like the way you expressed your emotion. Very beautiful poem. Keep it up!
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4 posted 2000-01-29 02:21 PM

Very nice poem.  I can see where you come from.  I posted a few more poems as u requested.... go check them out and leave a reply.  thanx

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