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0 posted 2000-01-20 08:11 PM

I think I am in love
its like flying with a dove
yet she doesnt know I exist
I have stared at her for a time
you might say her beauty is a crime
I cant imagine the feeling if we kissed

My freind says write a letter
I write it without intent
on giving it to her but still it meant
another step toward her

a thief takes the letter
the thief is her friend
I tell her I did not intend
to send
the letter to her
but she is unaware
the feelings she forces me to bare
and the possible friendship she is about to tear

from then on I was left to look
because of that fateful crook
at the letter she did look
my love for her was closed like a book

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since 2000-01-15
Posts 13

1 posted 2000-01-20 08:42 PM

Im in the same place as u (not including the letter part). Beautifully written. Hope she realizes what shes missing

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2 posted 2000-01-20 10:27 PM

<font face="Arial, Arial, Verdana" color="#ff0000" size="2">Ouch! Sometimes people can be so casually hateful, you know? Good poem Brother, even though the subject is a painful one.  I'll be lookin for more!</font><!signature-->

<font face="Arial, Verdana" size="1" color="#000080"> "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."
                                 -Charles Brugnot


[This message has been edited by Saxoness (edited 01-20-2000).]

since 2000-01-19
Posts 194
Massachusetts ~USA~
3 posted 2000-01-20 10:45 PM

Hey great poem. In my case I know I'm in love and he knows I love him. He tells me he loves me too, but ONLY in words. He just spits it out. <I'm not sure if he's for real> I just wish he could show me.    Keep up the good work!   Tell her. It's worth a try. If you don't tell her, you might regret it later.

"A true friend will always stay a friend
whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end."

since 1999-11-23
Posts 120
4 posted 2000-01-20 11:22 PM

Tight poetry skills man!! But bad situation!! Just remember keep your head up!!

 "Live to love or why live at all"
Deano :)

since 1999-12-02
Posts 443
5 posted 2000-01-21 05:31 PM

Good Job...  everyone has been in this situation one time or another.
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6 posted 2000-01-28 07:54 PM

thanks for the replys keep posting I love it
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
7 posted 2000-01-28 08:11 PM

Hey, when a chick blows you off when you've written out your feelings (even if they weren't intended for her to see) she is just insecure with herself or heartless. Cheer up! Nice job on the poem.
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8 posted 2000-01-29 01:46 PM

Great poem! Hang in there....if she's gonna act like that then maybe she doesn't deserve someone like you.


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