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since 2000-01-26
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0 posted 2000-01-26 11:59 AM

something which i gave to you so easily
they say actions speak louder than words
and in this case
words should have been spoken louder than they were
things weren't thought out
done out of feeling that it just felt right.
i care for you but not as much as i should
for i gave you a special part of me
if that's all you are after now
tell me now and please be true
cause i don't deserve to be used
due to circumstances beyod our control
it's hard to say exactly when i'll know
should i stay and give it a try
or just let you go
and hold on to the memories of that
beautiful night
on which i felt comfortable with myself
and more so with you.
and i pray that i can start anew
and next time give that special part of me
to someone who truly appreciates
what an honor it is to be
in the presence of me
undisguised nakedly.

© Copyright 2000 Kristina Gomez - All Rights Reserved
Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872
just about where I want to be
1 posted 2000-01-26 02:15 PM

great writing! i loved the poem. good work! keep it up!  


Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622
Ala bam a
2 posted 2000-01-26 06:15 PM

S3NSATION18....(And I thought my name was weird!)......Yanno sweets....I sure hope you haven't given as much to this jerk as ya said ya did.....If ya's not the end of the world yanno? By your poem.....I can definitely read into a very smart person...We all make mistakes, we all make unwise decisions.....even at my old ripe age...but take more pride in yourself....anybody with the brains you seemingly have...must soon realize that not all guys are sincere....(God knows I wasn't at your age....I was after the same "thing" most guys your age are)..and it's really just human nature...but ya gotta use good judgement...Really sweets...I'm not just an old fuddy duddy that doesn't know that kids your age are gonna fool around some no matter what anyone tells ya...cuz you've got all those damn hormone thinggies just like ya should have......But don't trust anyone.....develope a sound judgement, don't trust what guys tell ya....learn them, their sincerity and their general attitude towards everything.....grades, parents, goals, attributes....and think about yourself too....Don't give anything away that's as valuable as your heart......and sometimes, guys particularly have a "different organ" where their brain and heart should be......You are so smart to be able to write something like this with this much take those brains and spread them around your body and thoughts gal......

Just a thought from an old Toerag type'a old man that's been there and done that.....

New Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 3

3 posted 2000-01-26 09:43 PM

Just a question whats your Name?
Junior Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 31

4 posted 2000-01-27 01:19 PM

my name is kristina...and i am 18 yrs old...
since 2000-01-26
Posts 245
yellville, Ar, U.S.
5 posted 2000-01-27 02:33 PM

Great Work! it makes u really think twice about something and makes u really wanna make the right choice. Great Work!


Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622
Ala bam a
6 posted 2000-01-27 03:23 PM

I've enjoyed my short visit here,
You all are budding poets,
But being an old man of sorts,
I need to leave and know it.

I hope you all think of things,
Before ya pursue your dreams,
Cuz people will take advantage,
No matter how honest they seem.

Gals ya all are too vulnerble,
It's always been that way,
But think of your future and all of your dreams,
I wish you all a good day.....

Love ya....and adios.....Toerag....

[This message has been edited by Toerag (edited 01-27-2000).]

Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
7 posted 2000-01-27 07:15 PM

Being of the older generation as well I have to put a word in here. I was 18 once and I remember it well.You have goals and ambitions and we need to pursue them. Fill your life with friends and activities so that you do not have to fall under peer pressure and cajoling of males after your vurtue. There is so much more to you then what is between your legs and a guy needs to appreciate you for who you are. Always be true to yourself no matter what.
Junior Member
since 2000-01-25
Posts 19
Hialeah, Florida in the U.S.A
8 posted 2000-01-28 08:48 AM

Great poem! Seeing as you're a newbie, this is a great first impression! You've got great talent for poetry, and I'm looking forward to your work!


 That strange feeling we had in the war. Have you found anything in your lives since to equal it in strength? A sort of splendid carelessness it was, holding us together.

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