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Teen Poetry #2

Let Me In

abra-cadabra
Member

since 1999-06-21

Posts 75
Florissant, Missouri, USA

0 posted 2000-01-25 01:40 AM

Warm blood, soft touch
This has all become too much
What do you want from me?
What do you want to believe?
I can't live a lie
But I can't let you see me cry
It's too much to ask for
Because all I want is more
More thought, know, to understand
I can't be with you if I'm not your friend
Is it too much to want to be there in the end?
Is it too much to just let me in?

angel6917
Member

since 2000-01-14

Posts 478
WI

1 posted 2000-01-25 10:10 AM

I can definately relate to this poem. Keep up the good work!
~Kristi Lynn

"Sometimes people care too much. I think it's called love." -Winnie the Pooh

Alwye

Moderator

Member Elite

since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

2 posted 2000-01-25 11:22 PM

This is a hard position to be in. Exellent work, you did a great job portraying it!

*Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha

LyricFetish
Senior Member

since 2000-01-13

Posts 528
North Carolina

3 posted 2000-01-25 11:49 PM

I like your phrasing techniques. You are a beautiful writer!

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