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Junior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 18

0 posted 2000-01-24 10:47 PM

                 Sky Islands

Walking along in the warm sand
Alone by yourself or holding a hand
Feeling the warmth of the sun's hot rays
A sense of utopia, lost in a daze
A soothing ocean breeze blows of salt
Here in your place in Heavens Vault
The water is clean, a crisp clear blue
The sound of waves crashing is nothing but true
Walking along the water everybody knows
That wonderful feeling of foamy water soaking between your toes
Sitting back, with a mixed drink or wine
To realize it's only the sweetest decline
A world that is made of fire-not ice
What you want it to be-your own paradise
In this place there is wrong only just right
No reason for war, no reason to fight
A place of success, of goals to strive
A place where you say it's good to be alive
A place where the sun sets and the sky changes color
And the starry night is one like no other
You're never really tired, you don't need to sleep
And the stars in the sky do anything but weep
You belong up there, high high above
With feelings of Joy,Passion,Romance and Love
It's a place where you go when you're down or sad
It's a place where you go when life's dismal or mad
It could be a place to get better health
But it's dedicated to the finding of one's innerself
Who they are, their joy and their pride
To prove to themselves that they don't need to hide
Everyone has a place to run, to get away
Whether it's temporary, or for good, it's a place to stay
Everyone who goes needs to learn how to fly
For it's their only way to get to their Island in the sky


© Copyright 2000 Seth T Madden - All Rights Reserved
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148
Fredonia, NY USA
1 posted 2000-01-24 11:50 PM

Wow.  This is really good...especially for your first post.  I really look forward to reading more of your work.  Keep up the good work!!  

Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682
San Jose, CA, USA
2 posted 2000-01-25 12:44 PM

Wow, man, I mean, geeze, you have some major talent. Your poems(I also read the other one) are incredible, they left me speechless   If I may ask, how old are you? Judging by the quality of yer poems I would think yer way too old to be in the teen forum   Excellent work, I look foreward to reading more.

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion

Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682
San Jose, CA, USA
3 posted 2000-01-25 12:45 PM

Oh yea, BTW, welcome to passions, heh  

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion

since 2000-01-03
Posts 56

4 posted 2000-01-25 09:55 AM

That was a really good poem, i loved the ending lines.  You have some real talent...keep writing, i hope to read more from you.
Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada
5 posted 2000-01-25 09:48 PM

Welcome to Passions!   This is a wonderful piece and I will be looking forward to reading more of you.
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850
In the space between moments
6 posted 2000-01-25 11:32 PM

Welcome indeed!  Beautiful work!  Those fantasy worlds of ours are a great thing, aren't they?  And you did a great job with this one.  I will be looking for more!  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha

since 1999-06-21
Posts 75
Florissant, Missouri, USA
7 posted 2000-01-26 02:01 AM

Wow. This is beautiful. i can't wait to see more of your work. Keep it up!
Junior Member
since 2000-01-22
Posts 23
8 posted 2000-01-29 06:38 PM

wow.....this is a really good first post. i see you have a lot of talent. keep em coming.
Junior Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 31

9 posted 2000-01-30 06:43 PM

I really can only echo what everyone else has already said:  Wow!    Can't wait to read some more.


 My advice in life is; talk to yourself, you never know what you'll learn.

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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697

10 posted 2000-01-30 08:41 PM

Another wow!   Welcome to Passions! I really liked this poem! It has the same idea as one I wrote awhile ago. Keep up the good work!

 "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world"

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