This is about a girl who recently broke up with her boyfrined who used to beat her

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This is about a girl who recently broke up with her boyfrined who used to beat her

The Mike Sacks
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since 1999-08-29

Posts 129
brooklyn ny

0 posted 2000-01-20 10:04 PM

Leave it home,left alone
times forgot to let it show.
boarded up,closed the door.
lifes ****ed up,whos to set the score?

She'd squeze it hard,
pump it up.
she wouldnt leave,
till she filled the cup.
the blood was warm,
but still was cold.
now the excuses are getting old.

its borded up,and all is thin
no1's coming in again
no way in,her hearts locked tight
and now can sleep antoher night

I wish i were a poet

Dean
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since 1999-11-23

Posts 120
Canada

1 posted 2000-01-20 11:19 PM

Very Good Poem! Expressed the feelings very well and in a different way! Keep up the good work!!

"Live to love or why live at all"
Deano :)

The Mike Sacks
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since 1999-08-29

Posts 129
brooklyn ny

2 posted 2000-01-21 12:22 PM

thanks

abra-cadabra
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since 1999-06-21

Posts 75
Florissant, Missouri, USA

3 posted 2000-01-21 12:44 PM

This is beautiful. I know what it's like. Great poem.

HydroPHOBIC
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since 2000-01-21

Posts 2

4 posted 2000-01-21 12:50 PM

Mike,i havent seen any of your work,i just hear it everyday in school and We play it every day in our band,but neveer seen any on paper written in english not in music.
Now i must say,u've blown me awaly one again,and we should definatly put a punk sound like "adams song" to it,then play nasaly....great work!

Sharon

HydroPHOBIC
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since 2000-01-21

Posts 2

5 posted 2000-01-21 12:52 PM

Oh yea,I love you....

The Mike Sacks
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since 1999-08-29

Posts 129
brooklyn ny

6 posted 2000-01-21 12:53 PM

Wow color,havent tryed this yet,im in total shock from the alst responce,ut We have to speak in school tomorow

destiny502
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since 1999-11-23

Posts 57
OH

7 posted 2000-01-22 01:34 PM

AWWW!!! Thats so sweet! anyways, this is really another great poem as usual.. AWWWW!! sorry

im a mushy freak i know.

The Mike Sacks
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since 1999-08-29

Posts 129
brooklyn ny

8 posted 2000-01-22 02:07 PM

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