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sweetcollege_girl
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since 1999-12-03
Posts 872
just about where I want to be

0 posted 2000-01-18 12:27 PM


This is a poem i wrote after breaking up with my b/f...

A Single Rose

The last rose he gave me
stands alone in its vase.
I stare at his picture
with an empty face.

The shadows in my heart
can not be turned away
So I will suffer with them
until my dying day.

I see his shadow everywhere,
but him i do not see.
So i just sit staring
at the last rose given to me.

What I feel in my heart
hardly anyone knows
for all my feelings are trapped...
within a single rose.

well? What did ya'll think?


 "Superiority to fate is difficult to learn. 'Tis not conferred by any, but possible to earn"--Emily Dickinson-"Superiority of Fate"

© Copyright 2000 Lavada Miller - All Rights Reserved
angel6917
Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478
WI
1 posted 2000-01-18 02:34 PM


I understood where your poem was coming from.  I really liked it.  I felt the same way when my boyfriend broke up with me some time ago.  I think right now he feels that way about me...  
Anyhoo, keep up the good work!

 

Lacy J
New Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 2

2 posted 2000-01-18 03:52 PM


Hi, I think your poem was very beautiful, and it made me think about my boyfriend and what we are and what we will be when we break up. thanx
Lacy J

Singer1981
Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148
Fredonia, NY USA
3 posted 2000-01-18 04:27 PM


I really liked this poem.  It put into words what everyone feels at the close of a relationship.  Great job!  ~Sarah
Mistikman
Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682
San Jose, CA, USA
4 posted 2000-01-18 05:38 PM


Very beautiful and heartfelt, I love it.

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion

sweetcollege_girl
Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872
just about where I want to be
5 posted 2000-01-19 09:54 AM


thank you all for your replies! I appreciated them alot! You have no idea how much it meant to me! Thanks again  


Lavada

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