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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
She invades my thoughts always, tearing me in two Thoughts of what could have been, what could I do? Treating her with kindness and respect, wasn't I much the fool? Showing only the side I wanted her to see, my emotions were a tool I need to forget her But I long to remember I could have cared for her forever She wanted me to love her never She wanted us to just be friends Oh when will this charade end? I need to forget her But I long to remember I talk with her every day, acting very nice She responds in like, holding my heart in a vice This would be so much easier if she was cruel But she is not, so my heart and brain are locked in a duel I need to forget her But I long to remember |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
Travis, this was awesome. Man, I do not even have words to describe how I feel about this poem. I am still in the astonishment stage. All I can say is, outstanding work. |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Thanks, as the main supporter of my poetry(you respond more than anyone else, heh) your words mean more than most. I really like how this poem turned out myself. Isnt it wonderful how poetry can take unimaginable pain and turn it into unimaginable beauty?  I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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angel6917 Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 478WI |
I loved your poem. It seems so heartfelt, and it's something I admire. Keep up the good work... |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
Yeah I know. You can take feelings and multiply them or even take the worst pain and have it somewhat comfort yourself. It's amazing what words on paper can do to ones mentality. |
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Kitty Junior Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 20Paris, Ontario, Canada |
Oh my gosh, that was awsome. You have a real talent. Your poem made my heart ache. Can't wait to hear more. |
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Oo0ostephanio0oO Member
since 2000-01-19
Posts 194Massachusetts ~USA~ |
That was great. Keep up the good work. Someone's emotions can come across so well in words sometimes. (:***Stephani***:) "A true friend will always stay a friend whether or not you feel as though the friendship or relationship is about to end." |
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Nights Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 56 |
I liked this poem. I especially loved the first two lines of the second stanza. I know alot of people who could relate to the meaning of this,including myself. "It's my heart that pounds beneath my flesh it's my mouth that pushes out this breath..."-FTE |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
first of all, i love it  i believe that if you can make one person know the way you felt with a poem, youre doing great, and with this poem, your doing perfect ~~~Tamma~~~ |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Thanks everyone for the positive feedback. Nights: Personally, my favorite lines are the third and fourth in the first stanza. I was trying to convey how I did not act myself in front of her, but someone entirely different who I thought she would like. As for my next work, I seem to have hit a writers block. I cant seem to think of anything to write about. Maybe something will come to me tomorrow... well see I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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