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chollagrl4 Member
since 1999-08-10
Posts 65brick |
She had a problem, this she knew. She was depressed, and angry too. She saw him, it was love at first sight. She was black, and he was white. He saw her, they looked into each others eyes. What they saw was a surprise. They went out, and had so much fun, they even kissed under the sun. he told his dad, I've met a great girl, shes more precious than a pearl. he showed his dad her picture, but wasnt prepared, for all the anger his father bared. He said son, shes black, your white. He said it doesnt matter, but his dad said thats not right. His dad forbid him, to ever go out with her again, so he had no choice but to tell her this. They met at the beach, there usual place. She wondered why, he didnt have a smile on his face. He looked sad, like hed been crying for days, she asked him whats wrong? He said, this isnt easy for me to say, but we have to break up. I hope you'll be okay. She tried to talk, with shock in her voice. But all he said was- I have no choice. She said I understand, no ones ever loved me before. He didnt say anything, cause he thought hed hurt her more. the next day, he realized his mistake. So he bought her a rose, and went to her house by the lake. He walked in her room, and opened the door, with a smile on his face, But when he looked up, he was everything was out of place. Mirrors were broken, there was blood everywhere. Then he focused, and saw her laying there. He realized what hed done, and thought he would die. how could he do this to someone who he loved so much? He couldnt think of what else to do, so he picked up th glass, and killed himself too. |
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Angie New Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 3KY |
oh my gosh, this poem sent chills down my spine. It is a great poem. Keep up the good work. ~angela~ |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Cholla....this poem was a wonderful depiction of the hatred and predjudice in America. And it doesn't just go one way either. I think that Black, White, Asian, Indin...PURPLE.....it doesn't make a difference. We will always hate what is different from us, because we can't understand it, and therefore we fear it. And what better way is the to mask fear than with a blanket of hate? ------------------ "Despite all my rage, I am still just a rat in a cage." -Billy Corgan- |
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StratMatt Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 87Macomb, IL, U.S.A. |
Nice poem, it definitely does show both the remaining racial hatreds still in America, as well as the openness of many youth towards it. It also shows the conflict of family and love. Although I could see how upset the boy would be, it's also not entirely his fault. It's hard to go against your family's wishes for anything, whether your family is right or wrong. but anyway, Great work! ------------------ "I went into the woods because I wished to live deliberately, to front the essential facts of life, and to see if I could not learn what it had to teach, and not, when I came to die, discover that I never lived." -Henry David Thoreau "All comedians want to be rock stars, because they're cool. They always look like they're about to vomit. They have that rap before the song that doesn't make any sense 'A long time ago, there were lots of people, but that was a long time ago.'" -Dana Carvey |
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starboards Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467longwood, florida |
Cholla... when i read this poem i wanted to cry halfway through it...this poem is absolutly amazing...this is definatly a keeper...i pray that you keep em coming because i want to read more, hear me???? good... ***************** starboards ------------------ "If you love something let it go...if it comes back to you it is yours...if it doesnt then it never was" |
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