Teen Poetry #2 |
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In My Eyes |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
Catch the eyes of my mind press rewind to the times When I had fallen and was deeply entwined with the heart of a man and I still fail to understand when our bonds became weak and harsh tongues began to speak dirty secrets began to leak and he began to seek for another to heal his heart and in his quest we had to part and I was left broken totin’ my heart in a sling randomly finding the nearest fling attracted to the bandaid he’d bring but bandaids were no help on those lacerations 143 stitches to build up my concentration on that happiness independence contenment with me to be the beat at something anything to avoid more than just my demise to be so happy that I'm high and you could see it in my eyes…. Don't Fall.. Rise in Love -------823------- |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Very powerful, you words say a lot. Wonderful work. ![]() *Krista Knutson* ~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack, Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare, Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water, Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
I agree with Alwye. Very lovely. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
Hey..... I have to say Star Fairy this is one of your best yet. I love the description and the whole thought process of rewinding life and bad times. I have thought about this a lot but, you have captured it in the right essence. Awesome job. |
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nicnac8 Junior Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 46New York, N.Y. USA |
Beautiful! that was very powerful, at the same time it was pretty depressing. But i definitely liked it. Keep up the good work. "It is better to have loved and lost, than to never have loved at all." "All hearts are broken,beware those who never pick up the pieces." ~nicnac8 |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
Thank you so much for taking the time and reading my work, I very much appreciate your comments... and i would also like to say im sorry for the multiple posts, i realize after Marilyn's post, how frustrating it must be... so Thank You.. Don't Fall.. Rise in Love -------823------- |
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Jer Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 443USA |
Thats ok.... I brought the problem up to Marilyn because I have only a limmited time to reply and there are to many people posting thier own work and not commenting on others. |
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