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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
Prayer Kneeling silently with bowed head Hands clasped and eyes shut tight My mind returns to all my crimes I pray for God to hear my plight With loud and trembling voice I cry "Set me free, oh gracious Lord!" But the axe falls -- my head rolls -- The penance I must pay for sin -- "God is more merciful than men" The executioner replies and grins. "He wants a shoehorn, the kind with teeth/ People should get beat up for stating their beliefs/ Tour the world with a Heavy Metal Band/ But they run out of gas/ The plane can never land" **They Might Be Giants |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Hey, I really like this poem. Spooky. Not usually what I'm into, but it's really good! "To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world" |
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merely_a_jester Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 67Arkansas... that's all you get |
leaves me with that new car smell feeling; fuzzy almost keep up the good work merely a jester |
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Nimue New Member
since 1999-12-12
Posts 3Washington, DC |
The last two lines of this poem are great!! Very visual... I *really* like this piece. ~Nimue "Touch passion when it comes to you. As rare enough as it is, don't walk away when it calls you by name." ~Marcus Cole, Babylon 5 |
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Dean Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 120Canada |
This is ****ing sweet ass **** man keep up the **** awesome work!! "Live to love or why live at all" Deano :) |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
thank you all very much, i'm always pleased when one of my works gets good reviews *wipes the nervous sweat off his brow*... this was an experiemental piece in this style for me, mabye i'll write more when i get the inspiration  again, thank you sincerely, **jerome the boy whose brain got left out in the rain and nobody bothered to dry it off when they put it back in |
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nicnac8 Junior Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 46New York, N.Y. USA |
cool poem - it was a little scary, but i liked it. "i'd rather die on my feet, than to live on my knees." `nicnac8 |
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Kenneth Ray Taylor Member
since 1999-11-11
Posts 139Duluth, Minnesota, USA |
A bit of a surprise ending. I liked it. It reminds me of the verse in 1 John 3:20: "For if our heart condemn us, God is greater than our heart, and knoweth all things." Some people interpret this verse to mean that God is greater than our heart and thus condemns us all the more. Others interpret it that God is greater than our heart and extends to us mercy. |
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cougaryouth Junior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 25 |
Woh that was suprising, I was reading it and I was well this is an ok religious poem I like that and then BANG I find out its not what it seems keep it up. |
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Lil OnE Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 234Pasco County. Fl. |
poetry_kills... Hey... what's this doing here? Post it in Dark Passions, which is where I usually post. This was a great poem, I really enjoyed it, as would others in dark passions. In any case, great work, keep it up? You don't know me, but you don't like me. You say you could care less how I feel. But how many of you who sit and judge me have ever walked the streets in my shoes?-Korn ~Lil OnE~ |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
this one has left me a bit confused..... Don't Fall.. Rise in Love -------823------- |
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