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How can it be?
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Tina TT Junior Member
since 1999-11-01
Posts 45Victoria, Australia |
How can one so loved feel unloved, How can one surrounded feel alone, How can one guided be so lost, How can one warm be chilled to the bone? How can one without worry be so pained, How can one with so much be empty, How can one with friends feel so friendless, How can one who sees beauty be ugly? How can one who’s known God be doubtful, How can one so young be tired, How can one given much be ungrateful, How can one safe be afraid? How can one in the light see only dark, How can one so “tough” be brittle, How can one so lucky feel luckless, How can one who’s learnt much know little? To oneself one asks, How can these things be? I haven’t any answers, For this woeful “one”, is me. ©Tina TT December 1999 ~I know the rhyming's a little dodgy, and there's a sudden change of rhythm at the end...oh well~ <!signature--> <font face="Arial, Verdana" size="1" color="#000080"> ~What if you slept? What if, in your sleep, you dreamed? And in your dream, you went to heaven and there plucked a strange and beautiful flower? And what if, when you awoke, you had that flower in your hand? Aye, what then?~ </font> [This message has been edited by Tina TT (edited 12-30-1999).] |
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Leigh Junior Member
since 1999-12-29
Posts 20 |
Your poem is wonderful! I know so many people (including myself) that feel like that. You have captured the feeling very well in my opinion. Keep your poetry going. It's wonderful! |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
The technical difficulties can easily be fixed with this piece. As for the theme of the work....We tend to not look closely enough at what we do have. We let the short comings of our lives over shadow the joys right in front of our faces. It is a trait of human nature. The battle is in changing our perspective. Enjoyed this piece. Thankyou. |
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Tina TT Junior Member
since 1999-11-01
Posts 45Victoria, Australia |
Thank you both for your comments  Leigh- I'm glad you can identify with it Marilyn- Any tips on the technical things? ~What if you slept? What if, in your sleep, you dreamed? And in your dream, you went to heaven and there plucked a strange and beautiful flower? And what if, when you awoke, you had that flower in your hand? Aye, what then?~ |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Tina, We all feel lost at times, but I believe that even if one who "Has known God but is doubtful" can feel better again and see that... Even in doubt Just know that good will sooner or later come out! JOY |
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