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giving in |
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amandafoose Junior Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 11 |
Turn your head from the innocent And close your eyes with shame Take away your goals and dreams And replace it with your pain Give in to the hopeless The forgotten and ashamed Open up and swallow Your life will never be the same |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
short and simple.. good job .. could you elaborate a lil?? cuz it feels like it just stopped.. Don't Fall.. Rise in Love -------823------- |
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starboards Member
since 1999-10-14
Posts 467longwood, florida |
No, i think it ended perfectly...then that way the poem has more meaning...great job! Starboards "I wont look back, I wont regret, though it hurts like hell someday I will forget" |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Welocme to Passions. Well done. I enjoyed this piece. It may be short but it is powerful. Hope to see more of you.  |
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