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Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

0 posted 1999-12-13 04:02 PM

Walking.
Hold my hand.
Venture to,
another land.
Take me,
far from this place.
To a land,
without disgrace.
A land,
withpout problems.
a land,
without death.
a land where you don't worry,
about what's left.
A land,
without pain
a different land.
I've gone insane.
Take me away,
to where roses blume.
Take me away,
to where it's always June.
Take me away,
to someplace new.
Take me away,
I want to go with you.
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Live a life of happiness

Marilyn
Member Elite

since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

1 posted 1999-12-14 09:40 AM

Very nice. I enjoyed this little trip to another land. Hope to see more of you.

myslinky
Junior Member

since 1999-11-25

Posts 27

2 posted 1999-12-15 01:24 AM

This is a great poem. why don´t you title it Take me or I´ll go if you take me.

Just some sugestions!

UNLOVED-1
Junior Member

since 1999-12-15

Posts 16
dominican republic

3 posted 1999-12-15 11:15 AM

i really enjoyed your poem and to tell you the truth i imagined myself in that land. that is the land loves takes you to. probably you've been to that land i haven't but thanks to you i imagined it.

otis omar

Isabelle
Member

since 1999-08-25

Posts 176
Indiana

4 posted 1999-12-15 10:16 PM

Nice very nice. Good description. I think we all wish to be in this land. I hope to see more of your stuff.

Isa =)

adg925
New Member

since 1999-12-15

Posts 1

5 posted 1999-12-16 09:31 PM

I thought that poem was very inciteful and you did a good job

starboards
Member

since 1999-10-14

Posts 467
longwood, florida

6 posted 1999-12-17 11:39 AM

Very Visual, I'm liken it!!

Starboards

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"You will see a lot of things,
But they will mean nothing to you
If you lose sight of the thing you love."
-from the movie "At First Site"
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Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

7 posted 2000-11-08 04:29 PM

thanks. just addin this to my library.

Morning rain fell on my window, and I can't see at all. Even if I could it would all be gray, put your picture on my wall, it reminds me that it's not

watch_me_score
New Member

since 2007-04-08

Posts 3

8 posted 2007-04-09 09:14 AM

hey, i'm a new memeber here and I've read several of your poems. you're a really great writer! i especially liked this one.

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

9 posted 2007-11-15 07:49 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

~frustrated writer~
Member

since 2008-02-25

Posts 84

10 posted 2008-02-28 10:32 AM

how about..

>> NOT YOUR ORDiNARY LAND <<

**LiRa**

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