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Singer1981 Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148Fredonia, NY USA 
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These are a group of sonnets I wrote in 9th grade...enjoy... Winter The days become short and the sky is dark The fluffy snow has begun to fall down The hits the silent and empty park In the barren, deserted, quiet town Our hands holding snowballs, fluffy and white To throw at our friends, watching them tumble We laugh as we play, and cry with delight If we do fall, our snowball will crumble Skiing and sledding are fun things to do At first sight of snow, we head to the hill Going at the top speed, all the day through Staying out all the time, laughing until Spring will be coming the snow will be gone Flowers will be blooming, grass on the lawn. Spring The flowers begin to pop above ground The stems and the leaves begin to take shape The stems feel silky and the leaves are round Blooms blanket the ground in a colored cape Birds are beginning to sing their sweet song High up in the sky, they fly round the trees The wind through the branches whistles along The leaves silently floating with the breeze The days are getting longer, with more sun Which helps the healthy new flowers to grow There's more time to be outside, to have fun To play some such games not played in the snow Spring is a happy time for young and old The beginning of warm, the end of cold. Summer Children are playing outside in the sun Adults lie on chairs and try to get tan They swim in the pool, and have lots of fun Hot dogs on the grill, baked beans in a pan July Fourth comes, firecrackers galore People have picnics, family's unite When the show goes on, we utter a roar A roar of excitement and of delight Summer is the best tiem to play baseball All sunshine, no rain, slide into first base Out at second, "that's a really bad call! Get the umpire!" it's a wild-goose chase Summer is coming to its final day Sunshine dissapears, every single ray Fall The colors of leaves begin to change From green to brilliant red, orange and gold They float from high up, above our sight range They fall to the ground, and die when they're old The animals begin to gather food For the coming winters' hibernation The go about their work, in happy mood Soon, they will sleep in their destination The people start to bundle up with clothes The wind makes them shiver, and hurts their face Toes become frozen, as well does their nose Hot cocoa sounds good, to the house they race Winter and more cold are coming soon People are already looking to June. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions! Just a couple of notes. I am no expert on sonnets but they are supposed to be iambic pentameter. Your lines fall short of the pentameter. Also a sonnet is written with no breaks between the stanzas. I took a class on sonnets and I know the form. These are lovely poems but they are not sonnets. A sonnet is a very strict form. Any deversion from the form is not a sonnet. Sorry if I was too critical...*sigh* |
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Singer1981 Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 148Fredonia, NY USA |
As I said, I wrote these when I was in 9th grade. But, in response to that, aside from the second line of my first poem, where I forgot the word snow, I see no place where my lines are not in iambic pentameter. Also, about the breaks, I only did that so my verses were a little more readable. With future sonnets, I wont' do that. Thank you for your comments.  |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
As I said..these are very beautiful. I am sorry about the mistake. I read to hastely. You are right and the lines are pentameter. I was rushed this afternoon and didn't give them the attention that they deserved. I apologize. You have done a wonderful job with these. I tried a sonnets for the class I was taking and the form didn't like me much. I appaude you. These take much work and much effort. |
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