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sweethaert14
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since 1999-11-24
Posts 9
west,ca,us

0 posted 1999-11-24 06:11 PM


YOUR SMILE

I would climb the highest mountain,
Or swim the deepest sea,
If you would only smile at me.

I would cross the hottest dessert,
Or walk the ocean valley floor,
If you would smile at me once more.

I would travel to the moon,
Or capture you a star,
For just a smile from you; nowhere would be to far.

please tell me your thought s and felling on this poem id like to now your opinion

© Copyright 1999 sweethaert14 - All Rights Reserved
destiny502
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since 1999-11-23
Posts 57
OH
1 posted 1999-11-24 10:11 PM


this is a really charming poem. do you write poetry a lot? keep it up, sounds as if you are really talented!!
April Resi
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since 1999-10-18
Posts 119
Alabama
2 posted 1999-11-25 01:20 AM


Another great poem! I like it a lot!
April

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...in your eyes, I see my future in an instant,
And there it goes, I think I found my best friend...

melissaramsour
Junior Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 16
Aurora, NE
3 posted 1999-11-25 10:58 PM


I like this a lot!! Very good!
Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850
In the space between moments
4 posted 1999-11-25 11:16 PM


definitely a charming piece, keep it up!

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*Krista Knutson*

"If my heart had wings, I would fly to you and lie beside you as you dream....." ~Faith Hill: If My Heart Had Wings~



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