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pharon Member
since 1999-11-13
Posts 251alabama |
They tell me i'm Who i 'should' be That's fine with me, But whatever happened To all i WANT to be? They have put me in A Brady Bunch world, Only, didn't Mr.Brady Die of AIDS? I don't want a life That neatly ends after Each episode. I want to LIVE!! To have the freedom to Make bad decisions And learn, on my own, How to fix them, or not. When i die I want to have lived, Not just survived. Someone pop this bubble And set me free from This mundane exsistence They have named my life. ** i have been writing poetry my entire life but this is the first time i've actually dared to let people read and i would REALLY appreciate some feedback  ) thax a lot ** |
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April Resi Member
since 1999-10-18
Posts 119Alabama |
wow---I really can relate to that one. Where everyone wants so badly to control your every move and you only want to be you. Been there. I didn't like it all that much and eventually ended up telling them what I thought. Now I am who I am and don't give a d*mn what anyone else thinks of me. (For the most part, because I don't think ANYONE can completely not care!) Anyway-- hang in there and just try to be who you wanna be. Ignore what they want you to be and LIVE!!! Hope to hear more from you soon!!! April ------------------ ...in your eyes, I see my future in an instant, And there it goes, I think I found my best friend... |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
This is really nice, I like the comparison to a sitcom...... Welcome to Passions.  ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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Star Fairy 2 Member
since 1999-09-06
Posts 260cerritos, california, usa |
wow! you've done a good job with this one. ------------------ Don't Fall.. Rise in Love -------823------- |
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Bright Melody Junior Member
since 1999-11-06
Posts 37O'Fallon Illinois |
I really enjoyed this. Just always be yourself. That's the only thing you can do. Don't let anyone else life your life for you. Welcome to Passions. ------------------ Never frown because you never know who is falling in love with your smile. |
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Blue Eyed Wanderer Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 84Rhode Island, US |
This is a poem that many, including me, can relate to. Great job! Can't wait to see more of your stuff! Welcome to Passions! ~Jess~ |
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pharon Member
since 1999-11-13
Posts 251alabama |
Thank you for responding to my poem. there is no way for me to really explain it, but just knowing that people actually enjoy and relate to what i am writing really encourages me. thank you again SO much. |
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The Mike Sacks Member
since 1999-08-29
Posts 129brooklyn ny |
I really enjoyed ur perception while writing this...i could here u read this to me,thats how deep i could look into ur poem...its kinda blunt and streight out... now let me see if i can read ur life somewat correct u are under 17 ur family ahve some belifes u dont agree with? |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
Be you! And please share more poetry. I hear you. Your voice is spoken through your words and that is sooo powerful! And remember, sometimes if you feel nobody cares, someone does, somewhere. And they wouldn't want you EVER to NOT be yourself and enjoy life. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions... Nice work relating your feelings in this piece. I hope to see more of you here. |
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