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Teen Poetry #2

Australia's Captivity

Tina TT
Junior Member

since 1999-11-01

Posts 45
Victoria, Australia

0 posted 1999-11-12 05:04 AM

We were born in chains
Shackled by Mother England
We had the chance to
Finally have freedom but
Woe, we’ve been captive too long

PS. This is my first try at tanka form (5 syllables, 7, 5, 7, 7)
PPS. The subject is the result of our republic referendum, last week

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Marilyn
Member Elite

since 1999-09-26

Posts 2621
Ontario, Canada

1 posted 1999-11-15 04:44 PM

I do not know of the form you have attempted here, therefore can not comment on that.

I have heard of the vote that took place in your country. I think you captured your thoughts very well in this piece.

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