|Teen Poetry #2|
since 2000-06-01Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A
Loss of control.
What will be waiting?-
or nothing at all?
Sensing the bottom
where love may be found.
Yet once I get there,
pain is not bound.
Gliding so quickly,
but not quick enough.
Wanting to be there, because now I trust.
I said once before.
Now here I lay...
fallen once more.
Jeremy D. Halstead 4/30/00
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since 2000-05-31Posts 932
HEY Jeremy! I love this poem! for reasons that will be kept confidential (let's just say it brought back some memories) lol. "Never again,I said once before. Now here I lay...fallen once more." funny, I can definately relate. this poem tells me a lot about you! You have a restless soul Jeremy--which is a good thing. It gets you far in life! I can't wait to read your next one!! hey read my new one...saying good bye. before it falls off the face of the earth...or the forum I should say. lol
Love 2 Love Ya! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~
gotta love it!!
<font face="Arial, Verdana" size="1" color="#000080"> "Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves."
"Bleeding hearts release tears of fire"
"work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last"
[This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 06-10-2000).]
since 2000-06-04Posts 147
Hilton Head, SC, USA
now this is a nice poem, its short, kept me wanting to hear more. ive had that feeling, falling, although not in or out of love. you can fall from/to many things
anywho, good poem really great anaoliges(can anyone tell i really love analogies in poems?) and good feeling in it too, kinda a yearning but sort quite defeated feeling
i like this one alot!
always follow your heart, never follow others unless it is truely where you want to go, and never give up a dream, maybe just set it aside for a while... :)
since 2000-01-31Posts 228
I think this is a very good poem. It strikes me as being written from the point of view of someone who is on the brink of anyhtinbg and nothing; suicide, love, etc. I think everyone has felt like this at one point or another.
"The worst of what people do to one another is deceive.
Because when you love someone you control their version
of reality. If you lie to them that's like making them
autistic so that what they believe is reality is in fact,
not their true situation at all."
It's not the angry words that break the heart, it's the silence.
Someone said that true love is like a ghost -- often spoke of but never seen.
I've seen both and yet in my darkest hours, tend to believe that neither exits.
since 2000-06-14Posts 354
North of Hell
LOL you did it again Jeremy. Another great job. Seriously, you inspire me. I don't get hooked on certain people very often, but whenever I see you posted a new poem, I read it right away because I know something deep insightful and incredible is going to be found. Never ever ever stop writing, or I'll be very sad.
~*All that I have found in reason is reason just to not believe *~
~*Things you see the way you see them will never be seen again*~
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
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