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since 2000-04-09
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0 posted 2000-06-07 06:42 PM

We had become so close over the years
Your parting from this relationship put me in tears
When I look back I see wonderful memmories
I wish I could be one of those li'l fairies

I was just a lonely cloud drifting aimlessly
You came without any invitation flawlessly
You filled my thoughts and dreams
All you've forgotten it seems

You are my best friend and love
We'll stay like that forever
Though what you've really stings
But pain is lessened by joy memmory brings

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since 2000-06-04
Posts 147
Hilton Head, SC, USA
1 posted 2000-06-07 08:33 PM

wow, i JUST wrote something about friends too, about memories and things like that
this is a very good poem, well writen, good analgies, a feeling of pain yet a feeling of the need to move on as well
very nice

 always follow your heart, never follow others unless it is truely where you want to go, and never give up a dream, maybe just set it aside...:)

since 2000-01-31
Posts 228

2 posted 2000-06-08 11:05 AM

I really like this poem. It hits really close to home. Nice work.


 "The worst of what people do to one another is deceive.
Because when you love someone you control their version
of reality. If you lie to them that's like making them
autistic so that what they believe is reality is in fact,
not their true situation at all."

It's not the angry words that break the heart, it's the silence.

Someone said that true love is like a ghost -- often spoke of but never seen.
I've seen both and yet in my darkest hours, tend to believe that neither exits.

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since 2000-06-09
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3 posted 2000-06-09 10:52 PM

I can really relate to the theme discussed in your poem.  The joys and pains in life will eventually be forever cherished as memories.  Excellent way to state these experiences.
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Realm of Supernatural
4 posted 2007-11-15 07:08 PM



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