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Brom Junior Member
since 2000-06-06
Posts 16 |
Fade to Black I got a bottle of vodka. Helping me drown my sorrow. I just don't care anymore. If I live to see tomorrow. All of life’s pressures. Are starting to take their toll. Just can't seem to get a grip. I feel I am losing my control. I can feel myself falling. Into what seems like a bottomless pit. No matter how hard I try. There seems no way out of it. Makes no difference what I do or say. I just can't seem to win. Maybe I should face the facts. And just give in. So I guess this my last goodbye. I have reached the point of no turning back. The end has finally arrived. Fade to black. |
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Isabelle Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 176Indiana |
I can really relate to this poem. I know the feeling. Things do get better. Just hang in there. Good poetry though keep it up and welcome to passions. Love, Jeanna "Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls." ~Voltaire~ |
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mickel2995 Junior Member
since 2000-05-24
Posts 48 |
Welcome to Passions, I find your poetry quite amusing and wonderful. I think your a great writer, keep 'em coming!! god job, Micale |
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ILoveSrfrs Member
since 1999-11-14
Posts 69California |
Hey, Welcome to passions. I really liked this one. I think everyone can relate to this one in their own way. Especially loved the last line, like an ending to a movie. Great work, keep writing! marissa |
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DragonFang Senior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 522Missouri, USA |
First off, welcome to passions, please enjoy your stay. Now, I'd like to say that that is a beautifuly constructed poem, and very nicely written. It however is very sad, keep a stiff upper lip, I know from experience, things get better. "Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \ I am lost in my own mind. Some say the world will end in fire, Some say in ice From what I've tasted of desire, I hold with those who favor fire. But if it had to perish twice, I think I know enough of hate To say that for destruction ice Is also great, And would suffice. -Robert Frost |
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Brom Junior Member
since 2000-06-06
Posts 16 |
Thanks guys, I just lost my Grandmother and i wrote this like 10 minutes after i heard. I feel alot better now though :P I like writing about funny things, so watch for em (Gremlins)  Love will be the end of us... |
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Jeffyf Junior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 49Muncie, IN |
I lost my grandmother about a year ago. It was hard, but it did make me realize one thing: life is short. Look forward to tomorrow, but don't forget today. Remember the past, but don't live in it. I'm sure you'll do fine, and I look forward to the funny poems. Keep writing, your work is great. Jeff |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family! This is very good. I'm so sorry about your grandmother. I do look forward to reading the gremlins too! Please check your email for a special message.  |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
WELCOME to the family!! I hope you enjoy Passions! well, I'm very sorry about your grandma ... about 3 weeks ago, I lost my last grandparent.  but I agree with everyone else it does get better!  This poem is very unique and I'm sure conveys a deeper feeling than what is prtrayed. Nice writinf=g! oh yes, and I must comment on Gremlins! Nicely written! I agree!!!! Just remember that I live with an Alien! j/k!  keep up the intriguing writing! Love Always~*~Jessica~*~"Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves." "Bleeding hearts release tears of fire" "work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last" |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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