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StarPryncess17
Senior Member

since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

0 posted 2000-06-04 10:57 PM

A girl so empty and all alone
Waiting for you to call from a pay-phone
I paged you and paged you where did you go?
I really need to talk to you- your feelings I need to know
I'm lost inside of confusion bay
My tears flow down on this sorrowful day
My heart an immense lump of stone
Why did you leave me?--Leave me all alone
The phone rings!-is it you??
NO, just some guy selling super glue.
You now have her, you don't need me
So I am the one who pays the fee
I should've known before I fell in love
That she's the one who fits the glove
Did your kind words mean anything
Or was it meant to just be a fling?
PLease be honest and tell me how you feel
To yourself and even to me, please be real.

~*~Dedicated to Chris who leaves me alone in a sea of tears swept by confusion~*~

Isabelle
Member

since 1999-08-25

Posts 176
Indiana

1 posted 2000-06-04 11:51 PM

I want to congradulate you on your rhyming scheme. I have the hardest time doing that. That's why i stick to free style writing...lol. Keep up the good work.

Jeanna

"Poetry is the music of the souls, and above all, of great and feeling souls."
~Voltaire~

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

2 posted 2000-06-05 02:49 AM

"please be honest and tell me how you feel;
to yourslef and even me; please be real."
I love those lines so much because it shows that you can identify with the fact that by not being honest with yourself, you will only hurt other poeple. Shows alot of maturity in yourself and your writing. good for you.

Jeremy Halstead

StarPryncess17
Senior Member

since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

3 posted 2000-06-05 08:54 PM

Hey every one! Thanks for replying.

Jeanna~as for the rhyming scheme,I guess it's just natural it's the only thing that makes my poems tick. I've always written with a rhyme scheme. (with one exception...my poem "Daddy". that was just my feelings. thxs for your opinion!

Jeremy~Being honest is the only way to get yourself successfully through life. I have found that dishonesty only hurts those involved more deeply than the truth and always will. I've been lied to and told false feelings too, and it hurts more than the truth would have. thanks for your opinions! your kind words always make me feel stronger about my work and more inspired to write more. thxs!! =0)

Love you all!!! Love ~*~Jessica~*~

StarPryncess17
Senior Member

since 2000-05-31

Posts 932
Colorado

4 posted 2000-06-10 03:45 AM

well, just to update everyone...I just found out a lot about chris.He has just shattered my little heart in millions of pieces. He persistently lied to me and also the people closest to him -- his family and his best friend. I am glad that people are finally realizing who he is b/c on that day he is all alone, and comes back, I won't be here and neither will any one else. I love him but he deserves a lot for what he has done. Thank all of you for reading my work. Love Always ~*~Jessica Lynn~*~

"Love is the product of our discontentment with ourselves."
"Bleeding hearts release tears of fire"
"work like you don't need money, love like you've never been hurt,and live everyday as if it's your last"

angelgirl0849
New Member

since 2000-06-09

Posts 5
Florida

5 posted 2000-06-10 09:58 AM

Your poem totally rocked! It's very hard to "fall out of love", but it is possible. I hope you find someone who you can love and will love you in return. Good luck in life, love, and everything else!

Cortne

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

6 posted 2007-11-15 07:23 PM

Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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