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Teen Poetry #2

Black Eyes Burn

Lani_DarkOne
Member

since 2000-05-28

Posts 152
UK

0 posted 2000-06-05 01:56 PM

I heard the wind sing, the trees sigh,
I am frozen, a taut string stretched,
To the ultimate.
Immobile.

I saw the sky raging, time rolling,
Witnessed flowing lanes,
Meander languidly through lives.

But I am firmly rooted
Underground.

A ragged scarecrow,
In a midst of burning yellow, stares
Resolutely ahead,
Enduring violent Mother Nature.

Black eyes burn,
Flesh ripped by mocking beaks,
Smile torn by driving gales,
Clothes threadbare,
Disfigured by continuous cruelty.

Black eyes burn,
Sways precariously,
The string is plucked
A sweet ring echoes rolling hills,
Falling, gliding,
Black eyes burn
Through blinding gold
But I see,
I see.

**I wrote this a million years ago, but it's funny how I feel exactly the same as I did then..it's awakened alot of 'stuff'.

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

1 posted 2000-06-05 03:02 PM

I couldn't really figure out the hidden meaning to this one...I think I'm just slow today. It was pleasant to read though...just wish I understood.

Jeremy Halstead

TearsOfPearls
Member

since 1999-09-23

Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa

2 posted 2000-06-05 03:30 PM

This is a very good poem, I wish I could write like this. Job well done.

I think I understand what the poem is about, and a time ago I felt like this, but it passes. It's like a never ending circle, when you think it's near the end, it starts again, just when you thought you had everything under control.

Hang in there and once again, excellent poem

Lani_DarkOne
Member

since 2000-05-28

Posts 152
UK

3 posted 2000-06-06 01:23 PM

thanks Jeremy and Tears of Pearls(that name is from the Savage Garden song right?)

3 more years and I'll be free,maybe the never ending circle will finally break.

Lani.

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