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since 2000-04-02
Posts 36
Winchester, Mass USA

0 posted 2000-05-20 08:08 PM

okay before you read this one o' mine, just know that i love Bruce Lee, his words and actions inspire me every day. he once said.... "be shapeless, formless, like water, now you put water in a cup, it becomes the cup, you put water into a glass it becomes the glass, you put it in a teapot it becomes the teapot, now water can flow or it can crash, be water my friend"
im such a loser i recite that from memory!

In rain I come down
(you know writing this i feel kinda stupid because I used to factor zen into my poetry but all these "i am" poems are too deep for us. they seem too raw as if we are spitting out random deep thoughts without us giving much thought into it. IM actaully gonna stop there so i dont offend anybody, but i think we represent ourselves and write "i am" poems everyday. in every poem we write we give a little of ourselves, that is what makes great poetry, a representation of something that is seen through the writers eyes. id like some other peoples opinions on this stuff tohugh, so feel free to respond........

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Lucius Cade
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235
1 posted 2000-05-21 03:08 AM

I agree 100 %. When you try to write an "I am" poem you end up confusing yourself with yourself, and the poem is what you said, just random thoughts and emotions. Every poem contains a bit of us, each one defining our present mood at the time of writing.

 Lucidity is the answer to all problems

since 2000-04-23
Posts 119

2 posted 2000-05-22 07:41 PM

Ach! Absolutely. This makes perfect sense. Just as you cannot hope to define another person, you can barely hope to be able to define yourself, in the end. Each person is so complicated and so explictly detailed that any attempt we make at defining is almost irrelevant. Every peice of poetry we write is a part of our souls, and probably a much more intricate part then if we set out to say who we are.

I am earth,
I am air,
I am fire,
I am water,
I am shape,
I am movement,
I am serenity,
I am expression...
I am what I am.


 "We prefer to do things comfortably" said the Controller.
"But I don't want comfort. I want God, I want poetry, I want real danger, I want freedom, I want goodness. I want sin."
"In fact," said Mustapha Mond, "you're claiming the right to be unhappy."
"Alright then," said the Savage defiantly, "I'm claiming the right to be unhappy." -Aldous Huxley "Brave New World"

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