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Tears Are Not Enough |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand 
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I'm still "away" studying, but again, having a break, and I have been writing a lot of poetry lately, so i thought I would post some of it.. *_^ Tears Are Not Enough An ache, Oh what an ache. A hurt beyond pain, Pain beyond physical, A twisting of a knife, In my soul. An ache, Oh what an ache, A rip in my heart, Tattoo on my mind, A scream from outside, Only, inside... An ache, Oh what an ache. Dark becomes welcome, A ragged breath, mine, Desperate, my being, No point in crying. An ache, Oh what an ache. I can’t feel it; I am numb. My mind, I beseech you, Play not your tricks on me, For tears are not enough. -Lynne |
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Vball Chickie1624 Member
since 2000-05-14
Posts 116New York |
great poem...very deep and heartfelt. keep writing! - Danielle "Dream what you want to dream; go where you want to go; be what you want to be, because you have only one life and one chance to do all the things you want to do." "The role of a writer is not to say what we can all say, but what we are unable to say." - Anais Nin "Follow your own heart, not others." |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thank you, Danielle! ^_^ I haven't read any of your poems.. I'm just going to look for some, now.. |
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TearsOfPearls Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 322Vereeniging, South-Africa |
Great poem Yu Lan. In a way this is how I am feeling. It's like you are loosing control over the things you though never would change. Once again, this is a beautiul poem, keep up the good stuff. |
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Matchstick McGee Junior Member
since 2000-05-15
Posts 26Austin, Texas |
Wow. This is a great description of the pain of crushingly hopless depression. Very moving. -Matchstick [This message has been edited by Matchstick McGee (edited 05-21-2000).] |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
We've got a winner, folkes!!! Omigosh, this is incredible. I'm very impressed. WoW. Okay, enough sappy stuff, I just really liked your poem. Definately keep writing. *~Meredith~* It's another world But it's something more than ordinary Such a lovely day And it's nothing more than ordinary living That you're living - Lit |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
thanx, u guys.. ^_^ Hey, welcome to passions, Matchstick! ^_^ Thanx for ur reply!! ^_^ I'm flattered.. TearsOfPearls ~ Aah, thanx.. yeah, sometimes I think, if tears WERE pearls, hehe, well then I'd be rich. ^_^ aah, wouldn't we all? ^_^ Lynne |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
woo, hehe, u just nipped in while I was replying, LyricFetish. ^_^ Hey thanx, Meredith.. hehe, such compliments! ^_^ I must read some of your poetry.. Lynne |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a beautiful work! I have felt like this a lot (who hasn't?), and you describe it well. Great job. "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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aussie_princesss Junior Member
since 2000-05-17
Posts 15Australia |
this is a beautiful poem and i love it. Look forward to reading more of yours. |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
thanx u two!! ^_^ woo, u r too kind.. *_^ Lynne |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
This is so good, Lynne! Wow!! I guess this is the "study break" work you have done...lol... Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Wow this is an awesome poem.....it's such a great description of pain and sorrow. Wonderful piece  Salma "Not all the answers lie within your realm or mine, they lie within the borders." |
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